fail

attempt.

that was short o well good fic Ja.

he! cute, and sad too. yet, funny as only FMA could be!

o, this is really good!! well writen and loveabul!!

I LOVE YOUR STORY! I CAN'T AIT FOR YOU TO UPDATE!

Listen up and listen up good. You have an awesome story going on here and I personally would like to continue reading what is going to happen next. Don't let your reviewers down.

i was in a depressed mood and i loved your fic. thanx for givin' me a good read. l8r.

signed
-Tragedy Angel-
i write a lot of angst so go check mine out if you like sad stories. keep on the lookout for my newest one. . .The Highwayman. coming soon!

WHAT?!?!?!!?!~! END OF STORY?! *Starts crying* NO I WANTED TO FIND OUT WHAT WINRY WOULD SAY TO ED!ABOUT HIM COMMITING SUICIDE or trying!

You had asked about how to write longer fics? My secret is planning. I plan what I want to write for the chapter, all the scenes I want in there, and all the important parts that will come back to bite the reader in the butt. Plan it out and rewrite as need be. This isn't deathless prose. Rewriting is required.

Great chapter! Although, i'm wondering if we'll learn more about why Edward did it. I mean, speculation on how he feels about being alive after the fall. I know he regretted it, but still i'm always curious ^_^

Oh yeah in this paragraph:

'Nii-san!'-sweatdrop- 'I forgot to tell you that you had two slip discs, due to the fall.. So now you cant move.. Not for a few more months at least..' Al hurriedly mentioned to his brother.

What are "slip discs?" I'm not really sure, I don't know a lot about medical things ^^;

Anyway, I loved the chapter, keep up the good work~

poor ed

Do continue!! This was very entertaining! Good Job!

o looks good! I think the way you wrote it was awesome. Definitly looking forward to reading more if there'll be any. =P