It works. I guess. Often with writting people say there is not enough dialogue and too much description. This is the opposite I feel with not enough description. However the story is good. Stories like these grab my attention but then I guess at the end everyone is left wanting more. It's hard to find the balence between not enough and too much.

Still. Good story and I enjoyed it alot.

Great story, I wish it was more than just a oneshot.

Kind of confusing...

That was a really nice oneshot, I'm starting to really enjoy reading fics involving Susan Bones.

OMG.That was amazing.PLEASE write more.Very interesting.

Wow! really good.

I liked this, although the debate was very one-sided since the beginning. Harry's firmness was worthy of admiration, whereas Cho's arguments were rather ludicrous, and she wasn't coherent in her emotional stand.

Interesting writing style. One issue I had with this story is since there are no descriptions beside the dialogue, it's a bit hard to figure out who's speaking when. Other than that, it was alright.

I really enjoyed that. I like the writing style, though it only works for these short, one-shot stories. I also enjoy the Harry/Susan thing. I look forward to reading more of your writings.

You have a few gramatical errors that could/should have been avoided, but outrageously bad. One error that stuck in my head was "...me and Susan we[re] talking." The speaker always comes last, and it isn't "me was talking", it is "I was talking." Therefore it should be "...Susan and I were talking."

Other than that, this was interesting in that you picked Susan Bones. There really hasn't been much in the way of Susan/Harry interaction in any of JKR's books, and I'm glad you used her here.

As for the style of writing, it was well done in that you did nothing to *show* the actions and reactions of the cast and only used dialog to convey what was going on. As an experiment, I think it was well done, but I don't recommend this a regular style of writing.

Personally, I'd like to see a chapter 2, where there is no dialog but only the actions by the characters is written. I think this would be tough to do. You would have to explain where and how Susan were sitting; the expressions on their faces, and the hand movements. You would have to describe Cho's entrance, and the physical reaction of everyone to her presence.

Good job.

Interesting style, nothing but dialogue with no scenery or description.

The lack of sentence tags to show who was speaking got a bit confusing sometimes. When it was just a back and forth between two people, Harry and Susan, or Harry and Cho, it was fine and flowed easily, however, when a third party was introduced, such as when Susan started speaking again at the end, it became confused. I didn't get who was speaking for a moment and that caused me to have to stop and interruppted the flow of the dialogue. I think a brief tag to intro a new speaker or when the conversation goes beyond a back and forth between two people should be used.

BJH

A great one shot :) I loved it

Everyone seems to look past Susan Bones, but I have a feeling she's going to be important, I mean she is one of the only chanracters mentioned in PS/SS that we know nothing about.

Anyway keep up the great writing