Not wild about 'song-fics' but the story concept was nice.

This is probably the BEST Ranma/Nabiki story i've ever read.
Take your time writing this one, because the expectations you set for this one are HIGH, i doubt there is another Ranma/Nabiki fic as good as this one, i put this fic right there with Ranma/Kasumi's "Aijou & Aitou" and Ranma/Shampoo's "A Midsummer Night's Beauty".
On your profile you call yourself a "novice/amateur fanfiction writer", well i'm sorry to tell you this but you write almost like a pro.
Keep writing!

This is good i wana know what happens next Ranma/Nabiki is my fave couple strange i know but pleas update pleas?

so you ever going to fisinsh the story?

update please

This one was really good. It'd be great to see the next chapter. Your writing is improving by leaps and bounds.

this is very depressing you know.

I love this story! Are you going to contuinue it?

I'm liking this story pretty well, and aside from a few quirks of language use it's rather well written. However, you've added the straw that finally broke one camel's back, and I got annoyed enough with a certain Ranma fanfic (mostly, but other anime as well) convention to check up on sources. So let's talk about background reading, research, and parochialism.

Guess what?

Japan has socialised medicine.

Back in the early '90s, it had really, really good socialised medicine.

Which means that, all of you who base plots around the Tendous being beggared because of their mother's medical bill, or those incurred by Akane's mallet, or any other such, are guilty of extremely lazy writing, possibly caused by a mindset so narrow that you can't even conceive of a country having a system different from your own.

Let's do a quick test.

What side of the road do the Japanese drive on?


(Oh, and it's 'cessation', not 'ceasure' (ch. 11).)

This story is a real tear jerker in these latest chapters, and its good that you are being accurate with spelling and have decent grammar...

I really hope you bring it to a successful Ranma and Nabiki pairing, thanks for having Soun grow a backbone. Very angsty, please stir in more waff, Ranma and Nabiki are good for each other and can help each other grow as has been evidenced in several great fics. Keep up the good work!

Hello Mz-Kitty-Kat,
I just read your story here and I must say that I like it very much. I've read a lot of Fanfictions so far and I rate yours as one of my top favorits. Don't really know if that means anything though ^^. While I've been reading your story, I'm just facinated how close to real life your storry really is, how you manage to create a story, that sucks me into it even without all the fighting and supernatural abilities of all the characters. I was nearly entranced by it, while reading :).
I hope dearly that you continue it and have not given up on it yet.
sincerely, Taiteilijan

I dunno, the whole hair brushing scene felt weird for me. Doesn't feel like something Ranma would do, even reflexively. But till now everything seems pretty in order, so good job and please continue. Intrigued now :O

Argh. This angst is terrible. It actually made me queasy. You have to write more, and get to the RxN fluff again.

I really don't think Nabiki or Ranma will sacrifice BOTH of their feeling together. Once Nabiki can figure out Ranma actually loves her the most, it would be logical for her to claim him. I don't think she'd force him into a loveless, regretful marriage with Akane. Ranma will realize this too. Doesn't he get a damn choice?

I'm adding this to my alerts. Make with the happy!

Keep up the good (plot resolving) work.

nabiki should talk to kasumi about soun telling her to stay away from ranma. she should then disown her family in a towering rage. nabiki is smart enough to make it on her own. when the money stops coming in maybe soun and the rest will wake to reality. i doubt it though, let the family lose the dojo and end up on the streets. they deserve it. you could have ranma leave as well but he should do so at least a day after nabiki and maybe not until the dojo is lost. i can see soun having done a reverse morgage on the dojo or something similar. Genma could have tricked him into getting a huge loan with the dojo as collateral. Forclose on the fools.

Not much of a songfic fan myself, but this one was pretty good. Ignore these people who criticise lack of dialogue, this sort of piece shouldn't have any. And it's not badly written either (style-wise), although you *could* do with a good proofreader (technical-wise). For example:

You say "[the] very _illusive_ side of herself"... do you really mean 'illusive' (having the quality of or based on an illusion) rather than 'elusive' (eluding clear perception / evasive)? An important difference, and not necessarily obvious from context. (Remember, joust because thee spill chequer says a word is write doesn't mean its the rite word.)