Pretty good. My only complaint is that you included Kraden for precisely one line, with no explanation of how he got there, how Isaac knew him, or what happened to him. Your writing is of good quality and you managed to include the storm three years previously.

Holy crap. The concept is awesome, and so far, the story owns. I'd like to see more of this.

*added to fav story list*

Don't u mean Skorm, Torio? sorry, multi-gamer.

anyway, this is very interesting. wait, if issac reads ahead, won't he know WHY Saturos and Menardi are doing this? so wouldn't he then try to help? and then that would be different from what happens in his book, and the ... ugh, my brain hurts... unless he loses the book. is that going to happen?

you need more detail too between scene changes

Really cool! But it needs more details in between.

Good luck!

P.S. The feather should signify the feather of a phoenix, since phoenixes are supposed to be 'healers' or 'immortal birds'.

Nice, for an exteremly confusing chapter. But you said it would be answered next time, so...*Takes out every weapon in arsenal* Pick your fate.