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Einna Auruan 2006-12-28 ch 9, anon.	abuseI like it. It's well written, and the characters are rather accurate. Not too sure about one or two of Valens parts, but you did well. The story was pretty good too, allthough nothing earth breaking. I think you did a good job of changing bits to make it origional, but at the same time keeping to the NWN plot. I liked Deekin. You did a good job with him. Words on your MC...I like her. She's well done and well written, not to mention realistic. One thing I would point out, however... She's a Mary Sue. It's not as bad as a lot of the Mary Sue's you find in anime stories or anything, but she's certainly a Mary Sue. Bad past, dark side, raped, beaten, etc. etc. (Not to mention black hair, green eyes, incredible fighter, smart-ass...) As I said, it's not as bad as it could be, but it's mildly noicable to someone who reads a lot. Overall a good story. Well done.
Amousca 2006-10-13 ch 9,	abuseI really liked this story... I liked how much you could feel Valen's demonic half in him. Your Tasharene is good too, much more at peace than in the precedent parts of the saga (despite an unnerving tiefling!). And your Deekin is excellent :) Made me smile all story long :)
arrow maker 2005-07-08 ch 9,	abuseShort, but good. In a slightly warped way, Vale and Tash make a very cute couple. You did an execellent job with this story. I enjoyed it immensely and I know I'll enjoy 'Choices' as well. :D
arrow maker 2005-07-08 ch 8,	abuseThey finally realized it! :D I loved the cake scene. Deekin is so frickin' funny“Not funny, goat man! You two eat the cake and poor Deekin be so hungry!” LOL. Valen must feel terrible, yelling and beating Tash when all she wanted to do was release the deom taint. I'm glad they worked it out. And “Oh, boss, how could you forget tell Deekin about THAT?” was so perfect for the end of this chapter. :D
arrow maker 2005-07-08 ch 7,	abuseExecellent chapter. Valen's response to Tash's question about she had to offer was so sweet. :D Loved Deekin in this chapter. “Boss be sad because of you! Deekin not likes the goat man any more!” It's like dealing with a four-year-old who can't keep secrets. LOL
arrow maker 2005-07-08 ch 6,	abuse"He felt a sudden urge to protect her and at the same time knew it was the last thing she would ever need from him, so he only nodded and looked at her." I was quite tempted to yell, "You're falling in love, stupid!" when I read this line. ;) I can just imagine what Tash said to the Valsharess. Probably something about her 'special' armor. LOL. Fantastic chapter. Dying to see what happens next. :D
arrow maker 2005-07-08 ch 5,	abuseHehe, go Deekin! Your version of the kobold is utterly adorable. "Boss is wisest and bravest.." LOL. Loved how Tash saved Valen. That must have been really awkward for Vale to wake up like that. Anyway, another great chapter. This story keeps getting better and better. :D
arrow maker 2005-07-08 ch 4,	abuseMan, now I really wanna read the second part. pouts So in a strange way, Tash and Vale finally trust each other. I love how Tash has finally met her match in Vale. They're so perfect for each other...it's scary. O_O ;)
arrow maker 2005-07-08 ch 3,	abuseAnother great chapter. I love how Tash and Vale are starting to form a relationship. Man, it must have been even more humiliating for Tash when Valen saw what the priest had done to her. She must be really pissed off. I pity the preist, he has no idea what he's done.
arrow maker 2005-07-08 ch 2,	abuse“Valen!” The Seer hit the floor with her staff. “She went alone because you treated her the way an adult treats an irresponsible teenager." protests we're not irresponsible, we're just...challenged in the ways of duty. ;) Another beautiful chapter. I liked how Tash freed the slave woman, it really shows how her past affected her. Valen must feel pretty crappy, what with all those women yelling at him during the chapter. LOL.
arrow maker 2005-07-08 ch 1,	abuseAh, I see the beginning of another execellent story. Tash seems to have changed a bit since 'Longing', though I suppose her semi-revenge did that. The title is so appropiate, she and Valen ARE alike. :D
Stolen Socks 2005-03-28 ch 9,	abuseThough I've read your stories maybe three times, I've never submited any review. Shame on me. But what to say? This was the very first HoTU fanfic I've read. I love the way you write, I read it in the same breath. And no, this isn't any flukeyism but a bare truth :o)
Kendris 2005-03-12 ch 9,	abuseWell, Valen probably wouldn't approve of my language, but damn good job. Balancing strength and vulnerability plausibly in a protagonist is extremely difficult, but in Tash, you have succeeded in making her not only believable, but very engaging. Her character is well drawn, and her changes in mood very natural. The relationship with Valen evolves believably, as well (although the interlude in chapter 8 put me in mind of the old joke: Q- How do porcupines make love? A- VERY carefully. Sorry, my sense of humor tends to the warped side of things. On the technical side, the plot and dialogue flow smoothly (you sometimes switch from present to past tense without warning - I've noticed that in all your stories; didn't know if it was a deliberate technique or not). For those who have not yet played the game (and it's going to be a while for me; World of Warcraft owns my soul and my gaming budget for the forseeable future), there may be a bit of confusion as to what is going on between the scenes - such as what god Tash killed, but it's no big deal. The story is strong enough to stand on its own. One last thing: Deekin is a hoot! I'd love to see an account of how he and Tash hooked up. Keep writing.
gamorrean princess 2005-01-10 ch 9, anon.	abuseWhew! That was a bit of an epic, wasn't it? Very nicely done! This is one of the ones snackfiend beta-ed, isn't it? It shows. Anyway, your additions to the in-game dialogue were neat and fit well with the rest of the plot--you get points for that. Characterizations were well within permissible OOC-ness--points for that, too. And you get MAJOr points for NOT making Tash the Bhaalspawn. When I read the summary-thing that mentioned her Mysterious Past, I went "oh gawd, not again". Thankfully for all of us, I ignored it and kept reading. Anyway, I like it. Someday I may even get around to reviewing the other two NWN stories you have posted!
snackfiend101 2004-11-23 ch 1, anon.	abuseExtra special thanks? Yay! Not readable...just slightly more grammatical! I'm extremely happy to see this one up and on its feet again! Am presently in the process of downloading 'Choices' for my reading and editing pleasure...just wanted to drop by and see how things looked. From this end, it doesn't look like the new editor screwed it up too bad...

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