Its good please write more!

Humm... Dear oh dear. Don't suppose her boyfriends the bad guy, is he?

For some reason, I'm thinking 'Zorg'.

I think that the story is great. You could work on the dialogue a little bit, but other then that it is great

Good start. A lot of the details need fleshing out, but, that could always be done later. You might want to consider writing in stages. Get the initial idea out first, then go back and add detail and depth. It can only add, never detract and helps to bring the story to life.

I would like to see where you take this. The adventure is about to begin.

She hugged Ruby?Lol, I'd stay away from him...X_X

Great fanfic! Keep writing.Poor Alyx...

i like it, you should make more chapters.

WOW! I like the story! It's very good! I hope you update soon

-Thanks

Hi, YOU MUST UPDATE, (swinging my pocketwatch in front of your eyes, with a hipnatizing voice,) YOU WILL UPDATE VERY VERY SOON! Ok, now, that was a very nice chapter...no, are you going to update? (drops to my knees) "Please you must update, I'm begging you" but, there are some minor problems with the fanfic. Barely any details and it's too breif for speeches and all. I like the fanfic, but I think it needs a bit of polishing, ok? ?;)? Well, I'll be back, see ya!

-Sky66

good epilogue after the movie it kinda was a cliffhanger

keep going i really like the premise of the story

i really like it

This is really good. I love it!

hello i liked this story weres the other half thow lol i hope you can get it out here i wnat to read more it was good so keep it up i liked it lol _.

Great start to your story I really like it. Can't wait to read more so please udpate soon.

Buh-Bye _

Please write more there are not very many Fifth Element fanfics

This fic was very good. I enjoyed it very much, but I think it would be cuter if Alyx talked the way her mother did from the movie. Anyway, VERY GOOD. KEEP IT UP. (I like the way you had Ruby in character!)