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| Name: 2004-12-13 ch 1, anon. | abuseYour prose isn't bad, though the dialogue needs work. I'm wondering exactly what's going on here. This looks like it has potential but I haven't the faintest idea what's going on. |
| Lord Raa 2004-10-14 ch 1,  | abuseI am officially interested in where this is going. Post more when you can, for this is good. Laterer |
| Gohan-Chan 2004-10-13 ch 1, | abusethis story is really good. i want to know who shinji is getting beaten up by. is it some street punk or is it someone from class? please update soon, the suspense is killing me. i liked the way you did that whole slow motion thing, cause it makes you want to know who the person is that has that scar |
| dennisud 2004-10-12 ch 1, | abuseSeems Shinji's being chivalrous while being introspective. Course that's during the middle of a beat down of him and quite proibably Rei as well. I'm curious as to where this will lead, but suffice it to say that I'll await the next chapter to see! dennisud |
| bmatsea 2004-10-11 ch 1, | abuseits a little confusing, but good. |
| Guardian Steve 2004-10-11 ch 1, | abuseI thought it was not bad.It was pretty good.Can't wait for it to continue. -Guardian Steve |
| Great 2004-10-11 ch 1, anon. | abuseI'm absolutely stunned =] this story was such a good image of Shinji's mind. Hopefully your mind won't blank again, so that I don't have to suffer =D |
| Cyber-Undead 2004-10-11 ch 1, | abuseIntriguing, most intriguing... I'm curious about the scar, never mind the whole situation Shinji's in... Very well written/conceived those thoughts of Shinji! Meliked it ^_^ |
| Rusty Knights Productions 2004-10-11 ch 1, | abuseOh, intresting... First chapter didn't give good picture of what was going on but I hope next one is coming soon. -Knight Two |
| Lone Wulffe 2004-10-11 ch 1, | abuseVery...intriguing. The next part would be very welcome. |
| Legacy 2004-10-10 ch 1, | abuseI would comment...But i'm not exactly sure of what I just read...I think FLCL was a tad bit more direct. lol But please continue... |
| Hououza 2004-10-10 ch 1, | abuseI'm not sure I quite understand this, from reading the last part it seems that someone broke into Rei's apartment, and for some reason Shinji was there and is presently getting attacked...or it could simply be Gendo beating on his son for meddling with his creation. Either way an interesting start, look forwards to seeing where this goes. Good luck & best wishes, Hououza |