Wow that was amazing! You really captured Lucius And Karel.
The thing is that Karel is a very hard character to capture and rewrite. Since his avatar picture in FE7 looks very peaceful and he looks harmless. But in his portait in FE9 he looks like a bloodhungry beast! But ya, I can't even see him harming Lucius or anyone that harmless! But ya I can see this!

Awesome! Great Story!

Very nicely done! Though I like actual romance between Karel and Lucius that is consensual (though it might take a while for Lucius), this was as good as non-con between the two can get for me; not bloody, and Karel doesn't really hurt Lucius except for the bite; very good.

Is it just me, or is it getting hot in here? XD
Wow, you're good. I love how you wrote this. You should make this one-chapter story into a multi-chapter fic, seriously. My mind wants to know (and possibly imagine) the events that would happen next!

By the way I'm adding this to my faves! X3

AWSOME!!
love it!!
absolutely love it!!
YAY!!

Nyummy.

sukii likes the biting bit.

Oh, good! ^__^ I like it, you should continue it! Write about when Raven finds out, and all that! RavenxLucius is one of my favorite couples! ^__^

Oh YES! Hot Karel action! Whe! I love it! I always wanted a Karel/someone story! But there aren't many of those! This was wonderful! Nice, very nice description. This could not have been your first fanfic! Lies! This was so good! So well written! The two characters were in-character too! And I feel for that poor women Karel killed!
I love this!
*adds to favs; adds to C2*

*dies from awesomeness*

Glup! ... ... ... (°°)

Wow, this is really awesome for your first fic! Karel's personality was really well-captured, and so was Lucius's. I hope you write more!

This was very nicely written. I hope to read more from you. ^_^;

Continue!! I beg you! If you want, i can draw illustration. I can cook dinner to you. I can become your sex-slave... Just continue! You can write good thrillers, like "Silense of the lambs" ^__^

huh ... o.0; that was quite amusing ^^ lol kinda was hoping it wouldn't be a one-shot... XD ... I'm too curious for my own good... anyhow ... will be keeping tabs.. =3 and I shall be looking forward to more ficcies from ya ^_^

very good fic u have to continue!, I love the pair lxr ^^

O_O

You must jest when you say this is your first fanfic... Tis quite well written! Characterization was excellent, you didnt make this story pointless, and the length was very nice! I know I can't write that well. Great job! *hails*