There's something about the dialogue, but I can't put my finger on it... Hyper-realism, perhaps? Whatever it is, it makes the script fresh with a harrowing undertone. Melikey.

Holy **. You are such an amazingly talented writer and this is one hell of a story. It's dark and it's so emotional and you capture all their pain very well. Your characterization and dialogue is to die for. Nothing seems forced or out of place.

I don't even know what to say in response to such a masterpiece, honestly, anything I come up with seems inadequate.

The only thing that makes me sad is that all your stories seem to be abandoned...and they're all /so/ good.

But it's been a blast reading through all your work, so thank you so much for sharing.

This story is amazing.I didn't know what 2 expect when i started reading it but you got me addicted after the first chapter lol.
The way you have done the story is just great and i love the way you have kept them so in character. Also thought this chapter was amazing and well written esp with Naruto and Tadpole (love the name) lol. You wrote that scene so well and you could feel all the emotions Naruto was going though.
Also thought the scene with Sasuke at the end was very well written. You have done Sasuke character so well esp how you can tell he has fallen for Naruto yet he can't admit it 2 himself and also the fact he lets himself be run by his emotions and course Itachi.
I think what you have done so well in this story is how you don't hold back with there emotions , if that makes sense lol I esp thought the scene with Sasuke seeing Naruto eat the mices was so raw and the way you described that scene was truely brillant that i truely did feel sick reading lol.
I really can't tell you have much i have enjoyed reading this story and it's just a shame you haven't updated in over two years *sniff sniff*. I hope maybe one day you might come back and finish this because i really want 2 see where this heads and if finally maybe they can get their happy ending well as happy as they can be as it is Naruto and Sasuke we are talking about here lol. Once again you have such an amazing way of writing and i really think this story is just fanastic.

I think, hands down, this may be one of the best fictions ever written. How you characterize them (they're so ** up!) is very very close to how they act in the manga; they're both screwed up, and can't accept each other and how they act. I'm utterly speechless - truth be told, I saw the whole mpreg (without the preg?) thing coming from,...the first two chapters, but then I thought that this story was too awesome...I have nothing against this fiction, I really don't. This may very well be perfect. (And you put in the dark themes that people like me :coughweirdcough: love so much! *-*)

And you've just...I'm so speechless. I can't wait for the end, it's so nuts. I read this entire thing in a day cuz I was so addicted. You're amazing.

Ah Ha! I totally expected it but you still managed to surprise me. I'm so glad I stumbled across your story it's a good read!If thinking what made me expect your surprise? It was a comment from naruto when he said somethin about 'being like a ** in heat'? and then stuff about the den and little clues like that. Your idea was really clever. Thanks for letting us read your work. :D

Any cance of an update in the next year? get you may have wuit the story or n actually have a proper plot but please, i love this, :P love you, x

wow...i just read that whole thing in one sitting. it is now 4:20 AM. all i can think is that no, i never saw an mpreg coming and boy did you do a fantastic job of weaving this tale. i stand in awe. of course, i've noticed that this hasn't been updated in over a year and that makes me very sad, because i want to know what happens next! but you are without question a literary genius, creating this plot and keeping them in character and all this stuff. it's amazing. originally i wasn't a fan of sasuke being uber dark and creepy and f-ing messed up, but in reality, i think he would be like that, going through everything that he did, so i applaud your insight into that character. the sheer length of this fic is also admirable; i can't even imagine creating this much material for any fandom... you're amazing! i'm a fan! i hope someday you find the inspiration to finish this story, cuz i want to see a meeting of sasuke and his son! (and itachi getting his ** handed to him...is that too much to ask? lol) -bows- thanks for writing this!

-O.A.

So it's two years later and I'm guessing there won't be an epilogue.

kukukachoo, that sucks, because I really liked this fic.

Wow, this is probably one of the best stories I've ever read. EVERYTHING was so perfectly set up and done! I love the fact that this is an mpreg but without the pregnancy part. You write so brilliantly and in a very realistic fashion, it pulls at my heart! You are just so talented at writing and you just have a way with words. You are so creative and your originality is so there in every paragraph I read.

I love the way you wrote the relationship between Sasuke and Naruto. Their relationship was so sadistic at first and I loved it so much. I loved watching their relationship develop into something more. I think it turned so sweet later on in the end.

I LOVED reading every bit of this fic and I hope you can continue to update this fic. I'm really sad that you haven't updated in so long, over a year. I'm still hoping for an update, so I hope you don't disappoint me or your other fans. Please update soon?

Okay! I won't approach this review in the category of fanfic because it is obviously beyond that. There were moments I held my breath for so long and my vision blurred, at times reminding me I needed to breathe at others reminding me to wipe the bloody monitor or my eyes ;)

It was gripping I can't believe I actually had the intention of skimming it. One did not need prior knowledge of these characters because you stripped them down and clothed them in emotionally drenching, priceless pitiable rags. I love the style - I cannot point it to anyone per se, except perhaps (forgive me for this) Poe and Greene. I've always loved Poe. That false sense of security he proffers all the while the thrum of macabre inescapble in ambiance - all that present here as well as the crisp clear characterisations of Greene.

What I especially love and I give my hat heck my socks off to you for this is that you didn't throw in a blinders. It was all so simple. I am extremely clucky atm (yikes) and have a great affinity for mpregs in the FANDOM ;) so I read all the signs, the heat, the cycles even during Academy years, the extreme posessiveness, the cleaning, the missing moments - food, time, mud, chakra but the herrings were stomach clenching. I guess the "them" although the main plot would be categorised as a subplot - the pure emotive elements they are and the explosive compound they become - Sasuke being the trigger, Sasuke's NEED to/for hate. What a mess they are apart and the mesh they are together. Heck now this review is making my monitor blurry again :)

Brilliant subtle use of vocab. I have not moved from here unless to the bathroom since chapter one and heck I may have developed apnea while at it :). One of my greatest fears as you suckerpunched me was that this would be another incompleteR because I couldn't fathom the complexities you addressed with the thoroughness you have done so in 7 chaps.

Yes it's missing that final part but I have hope you will not abandon it as it is a whopping emotional investment. Such a huge undertaking and I can't begin to even vocalise on how much it is appreciated. I just hope to be able to witness their first actual (mutual) kiss and (because I'm selfish lol) to see them interact with Tadpole lol.

Awed!

Every time I re-read this story I get chills. The stumbling broken storyline reflecting the inner landscape of these two boys. It wows me every time.

So even if you have no interest in writing out the rest of it, I would LOVE to see a small summary about what you had planned. This piece just has to have some sort of closure for how intense it is.

Wow fascinating style
Great story!

Wow, I did not see that coming. So are you going to continue this? It's really good and I'd like to know how it ends.

Beans

Excellent story; excellent mpreg reasoning. Argh! I suck at reviews, forgive me. I love to get them myself, but am horrible at them. I don't usually read unfinished stories, but something about this drew me in and won't let me go. Fantastic stuff.

Ren.

Update!