My heart broke, reading your ending. But that wasn't a bad thing this time; it meant your words hit me. The ending was very, very sad and it almost made me cry. It's nothing like me to read dark stories, but this was an exception. From a scale from one to ten, your story got a 25. Well done.

Wow. Incredible. You have some major talent. Bringing in the monsters and the barrel items was something of a stroke of genius. One thing you didn't make clear: what exactly does Divinity think Sheba "is"?

Wah! I didn't like the ending... it was intresting,though. *sniff* It made me cry!

Wow. That was dark, and tragic. But that was one of the best stories I've ever read. Really, it was awesome. It almost made me cry, which I almost never do while reading fanfiction. I can't think of a single way to improve it, it was that good.

Yay for Omniflyer! Now maybe you can get back to your other fic.

Well... I guess the world is doomed huh?

But you have a point, who would have ever thought that simple things like looking into a jar and mind-reading could be considered wrong? Well, as the player, the answer is no, but for the others...

Nice story.

;_; That is all. ... I half expected you to revive everybody, but the deaths and everything just ties in with the message, doesn't it? Poor everybody... Weyard is surely doomed, there's no such thing as a perfect human. It's shocking, even simple things like Mind Read or 'Isaac checked the jar, Isaac got a Lucky Medal' are a crime... ow...

Wowzorz. I can just FEEL a big battle spanning three and a half chapters coming up. Please don't disappoint me! ^_^ Well, once again, nice job. The Adepts are despairing from the difficult job of keeping Divinity in, who is staying out past her curfew. :) Just kidding, but nice job anyway. Are you ever going to update Wings of Hope?

Your everfaithful reviewer, Caster of Chaos.

Well, you know most of my comments...but here's another review for ya.

Like I said, I was really surprised when finding out who died. It makes it that much darker, which is what you want, so good job on that.

I hope to see the next chapter soon!

~Joker

Wah! You killed Eoleo! (Sobs off in the distance. Poor kid!
Other than that, it(once again) was a MAGNIFICENT chapter! If this story isn't on my favorites list, I'm putting it on! Sounds like emotions are running high... The world is disintegrating (sp?) in a way no one thought. The Adepts shall be disbanded, they will die one by one, judged by the cookies they stole, long, long ago...
Core: What the crap.
Sorry, I'm in a depressed mood. But I bet (0 dollarsm though) you will include SOMEthing like that.
-Caster of Chaos

Well... I guess I guessed wrong... didn't see that one coming...

Well, I'm looking forwards to the mass destructio of Weyard... I mean, nobody is safe...

Evey: Don't worry, she's always like that.

Hey omni! Great Fic! I'm usually...hold on... NEVER in to Golden Sun fics but I really liked this one! And I'm not just saying that because you know me. In Person.
Anywayz, great fic!

Jibbi

Hmm...looks like the Adepts have a new problem on their hands. Very interesting.

Everything was detailed enough, and I don't think there were more than one or two errors. One I remember is in the last line of the Isaac/Mia scene, you put "It's" when it should be "It".

I have an idea on who's grave Isaac will be visiting. Probably either Kraden's or his father's. I guess I'll find out soon enough.

Update soon!

~Joker

Although I sadly could see the whole "black and white" view of the world coming from a mile away, this is still a good start.

And, I have my suspicions on that grave you were talking about, perhaps a certain old scholar who has the ability to talk too much?

Hmm... an interesting idea, at least. This isn't particularly dark, and Divinity's black-and-white view of the world isn't very impressive.

Still, Divinity's "justice" is rather unnerving, and her methods are thought-provoking. I still think this could stand for a little bit darker, since I'm really not feeling the darkness yet. But, this *is* your first attempt at it, so I'm a little more than certain that you're going to start off slowly and see how it goes.

Keep it up, Omniflyer.

~Tetra.

O_O Wow. Remind me never to piss HER off. Anyway...
This is really, REALLY good. I would write a longer review, but...I can't. So keep it up and update soon!