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Kd7sov
2005-04-23
ch 5,
abuseWow. Incredible. You have some major talent. Bringing in the monsters and the barrel items was something of a stroke of genius. One thing you didn't make clear: what exactly does Divinity think Sheba "is"?
*******
2005-03-24
ch 5, anon.
abuseWah! I didn't like the ending... it was intresting,though. *sniff* It made me cry!
Caster of Chaos
2004-12-22
ch 5,
abuseWow. That was dark, and tragic. But that was one of the best stories I've ever read. Really, it was awesome. It almost made me cry, which I almost never do while reading fanfiction. I can't think of a single way to improve it, it was that good.

Yay for Omniflyer! Now maybe you can get back to your other fic.
Taiga
2004-12-21
ch 5,
abuseWell... I guess the world is doomed huh?

But you have a point, who would have ever thought that simple things like looking into a jar and mind-reading could be considered wrong? Well, as the player, the answer is no, but for the others...

Nice story.
Kyarorain
2004-12-21
ch 5,
abuse;_; That is all. ... I half expected you to revive everybody, but the deaths and everything just ties in with the message, doesn't it? Poor everybody... Weyard is surely doomed, there's no such thing as a perfect human. It's shocking, even simple things like Mind Read or 'Isaac checked the jar, Isaac got a Lucky Medal' are a crime... ow...
Caster of Chaos
2004-11-14
ch 4,
abuseWowzorz. I can just FEEL a big battle spanning three and a half chapters coming up. Please don't disappoint me! ^_^ Well, once again, nice job. The Adepts are despairing from the difficult job of keeping Divinity in, who is staying out past her curfew. :) Just kidding, but nice job anyway. Are you ever going to update Wings of Hope?

Your everfaithful reviewer, Caster of Chaos.
Joker's Specter
2004-10-30
ch 3,
abuseWell, you know most of my comments...but here's another review for ya.

Like I said, I was really surprised when finding out who died. It makes it that much darker, which is what you want, so good job on that.

I hope to see the next chapter soon!

~Joker
Caster of Chaos
2004-10-28
ch 3,
abuseWah! You killed Eoleo! (Sobs off in the distance. Poor kid!
Other than that, it(once again) was a MAGNIFICENT chapter! If this story isn't on my favorites list, I'm putting it on! Sounds like emotions are running high... The world is disintegrating (sp?) in a way no one thought. The Adepts shall be disbanded, they will die one by one, judged by the cookies they stole, long, long ago...
Core: What the crap.
Sorry, I'm in a depressed mood. But I bet (0 dollarsm though) you will include SOMEthing like that.
-Caster of Chaos
Taiga
2004-10-28
ch 3,
abuseWell... I guess I guessed wrong... didn't see that one coming...

Well, I'm looking forwards to the mass destructio of Weyard... I mean, nobody is safe...

Evey: Don't worry, she's always like that.
Jibbi
2004-10-25
ch 1,
abuseHey omni! Great Fic! I'm usually...hold on... NEVER in to Golden Sun fics but I really liked this one! And I'm not just saying that because you know me. In Person.
Anywayz, great fic!

Jibbi
Joker's Specter
2004-10-24
ch 2,
abuseHmm...looks like the Adepts have a new problem on their hands. Very interesting.

Everything was detailed enough, and I don't think there were more than one or two errors. One I remember is in the last line of the Isaac/Mia scene, you put "It's" when it should be "It".

I have an idea on who's grave Isaac will be visiting. Probably either Kraden's or his father's. I guess I'll find out soon enough.

Update soon!

~Joker
Taiga
2004-10-22
ch 2,
abuseAlthough I sadly could see the whole "black and white" view of the world coming from a mile away, this is still a good start.

And, I have my suspicions on that grave you were talking about, perhaps a certain old scholar who has the ability to talk too much?
Tetra Seleno
2004-10-21
ch 2,
abuseHmm... an interesting idea, at least. This isn't particularly dark, and Divinity's black-and-white view of the world isn't very impressive.

Still, Divinity's "justice" is rather unnerving, and her methods are thought-provoking. I still think this could stand for a little bit darker, since I'm really not feeling the darkness yet. But, this *is* your first attempt at it, so I'm a little more than certain that you're going to start off slowly and see how it goes.

Keep it up, Omniflyer.

~Tetra.
Arowyn
2004-10-21
ch 2,
abuseO_O Wow. Remind me never to ** HER off. Anyway...
This is really, REALLY good. I would write a longer review, but...I can't. So keep it up and update soon!
Caster of Chaos
2004-10-20
ch 2,
abuseWow... I'm in awe...
This is VERY deep and thought-provoking. I still can't tell if Divinity is gonna be good or bad... You have a SPECIAL way of turning things around. ^o^
Character emotions are written as if you were watching them, perfectly conveyed. 10 outta 10. 11 if I could. In other words, GREAT!

-Caster of Chaos (still with mouth wide open)
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