I like it keep typing

wow some spell mistakes but over all good. why a cliff? meany. i tell you

Omg what a sad chapter. Jake was very mean in this one. But so good.

oh god this is a good fanfic!! at times abit confusing...>< buh its still kwl!! plz update soon!

That was oh-so-sweet! I like this Jake guy. Please continue soon!

I like it! Two things though that you're not going to like. One is that prolog is actually spelled prologue (common mistake, don't lose any sleep over it). The other thing is, notice my name! I happen to really like Thayet, so could you make her sound a bit less lustful? (I might have spelled that wrong lol ^_^) Overall, great fic. To all you Tamora Pierce fanfic authors out there, KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!

that was brilliant! Continue soon please!

i think its kinda cool. the Rasmus rock! its original with jon nd stuff. i lie characters who are mean 2 peeps nd hate love. they make stories complex.

heyheyhey:) fantabulous chappie dude!

Not flaming it or anything, but you have way too many run on sentences. Remember, sentences have to have a subject AND a verb. You might also want to try combining some sentences, longer sentences make your writing better. Otherwise, it just seems choppy. You may have a good plot line here, but the story RIGHT NOW seems choppy and it's hard to understand because of the grammatical errors. Also, in the prologue, watch the usage of "ounce" instead of "once". I hope this helps, keep working!
~Cel

awesome start dude! you've got me interested!