great job. It was really interesting

What the heck? It is really confusing. But I like it.

good idea. sort of. bad writing.

I LOVE IT

it was ok but thoughtit would be a suprise ending like it was Marco.

That sickening and pathetic sorry but it's true

you are an amazing writer, not just in fanfic, but in your wrtiting in general. You are excelent in discription and your irst line of the story really makes me want to read more! BRAVO!

Really Good. Read it is u like sex scens.

Has the potential to be very good, but needs a rewrite.

Man, I am writing something vaguely similar to this, and I don't want you to think I'm copying your work, but it's not really very similar just vaguely. ::reads what she just wrote:: I am way too highstrung. Anyway, I that the story was nice.

It was a good story... Did anyone else notice the words seemed kinda stiff though..? "I did not know" "This will not happen again" no abbreiviations or normal slang or anything... Is English a second language 2 U? (she asks the author of this story)

Um...okay. That was nice. I like it!

Very disturbing, but well written. Two questions: 1. Why didn't Rachel just morph grizzy and knock him unconcious, or escape? 2. Who was he? (It's implied that she knew him from somewhere)

oooh. scary.