Your story has a very good basis plot. There are lots of ways to go with this, and i hope you explore them. No matter which way you choose its bound to be interesting. The only thing is that your OCs need some major help, especially Kai. She's like the definition of a Mary-Sue. If you have no idea what im talking about A mary-sue is a girl who has the worst past possible yet triumphs over it all and everyone loves her and she has NO FAULTS. shes the perfect person. now my qestion is...who can relate to that?

please please PLEASE reconsider your Kai character, give her something that the readers can relate to, such as a fault. I mean someone with her past would not act like how she does, they would be REALLY screwed up in the head. Shy, most likely paranoid.

I'm really sorry i was the one who had to point this out to you because most likely your gonna hate me and this review. but i really am just trying to help. ]This story should reach its full potential.

Ps: Hopefully the html code in this thing wont cut off these URLs but i urge you to visit these sites...
http://enterprise.mathematik.uni-essen.de/~bastian/Ranma/MarySue.html AND

This was a pretty good chapter. However, you're chapters are a little short. But good none the less. Ja ne.