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| xxxNikki-Kinoxxx 2006-04-02 ch 1,  | abuse... wow. really good. I liked it. it's kinda sad but sad stories are actually my favorite *more emotion* so yeah! Great Job! |
| ArkNorth 2004-10-17 ch 1, | abuseNot bad - if you need an editor let me know. Welcome to the new Haibane Renmei forums here on FFN! This is a very nice study on Reki's emotions at the time just prior to her day of flight. The only things I found off to the story were - 1 - she has that unique cigarette lighter, so she wouldn't strike a match, and - 2 - her Sin-Bound feathers were still with her - she took the same medication that she had given Rakka for her spots (we see her doing this in one of the last episodes). Other than those two little hiccups, well written and easy to fix. Keep 'em coming! A-N |