 WITS 2009-01-21 . chapter 1 Amazing.
All of them were well-written, although I liked Makoto's the least- in some places it just didn't flow right. Her's could definitely have been better, especially at the end, which also confused me a bit. I think you should have just left that part off, the 'she was happy' sentence was a much better place to end than the sentence 'Kino Makoto will sign out'.
I liked Ami-chan's the best, it seemed to have the most emotion out of them, and it moved me the most, especially the last sentence in the second paragraph and the end bit. The second paragraph was a bit bunched up compared to the rest though. Mako-chan's first paragraph is also a bit bunched up, but not as badly. :/
The third, I thought was a good ending, bittersweet and poignant. I don't think it was as emotional as Ami-chan's, but it served very well as an overall ending to it. I think you should have seperated them though, put them in different 'chapters', so to speak. I think it would have made each one more special and unique. But that's just a personal thing.
Don't be discouraged by my criticsm, though. Other than those little things, most of which are personal opinions and nitpicking anyway :p, I think it was pretty good. |
 hyungie 2008-09-23 . chapter 1Aw, that was really cute. |
 sacred07 2008-08-17 . chapter 1this is one of the best one shot i had read.
it makes me cry every time i reread this.
hopefully u'll continue to write rei/minako fics!! |
 akira emiko 2007-06-14 . chapter 1oh i love this so much! you portrayed everyone's point of view so well, i was at the brink of tears. definitely putting this in my favorites^^ |
 wei wei 2007-04-11 . chapter 1 Simply wonderful.
It's so realistic.
Their emotions and thoughts.
I really enjoyed this one-shot.
Thank you! |
 V-Babe 2005-11-07 . chapter 1 Humm... :'( THIS IS SI SAD ! I love your story still ! A sequel with minako and rei'S thought would be great ! Ciaow ciaow ! |
 Reianna 2005-08-10 . chapter 1holy hell... this story has made me cry SO MUCH. that is SO not fair! *cries some more* |
 PinaPoe 2005-06-06 . chapter 1Short, but to the point. I really like Usagi's pov, and her last line. |
 PinkShiori 2004-10-21 . chapter 1I hate you !! U know ! I really do !!
I read your fic and... couldn't stop crying for about 20 min !
You write so well it was like I really felt the characters's feelings inside of me, very sad feelings...
You're a very good witer, I hope you'll write some more cheerful fics. I know U can do that ^^
Se ya V^^ |
 joefong 2004-10-20 . chapter 1 GREAT!
You catch the scenes of the love tension between Rei and Minako!
It is good to describe ReiXMinako love by writing Mokoto, Ami and Usagi's POV!
You do it wonderful!
I hope you write more!
For example,Rei's POV for Minako and Minako's POV for Rei~~
P.S.In Usagi's POV,
"Why? I had answered silently, because she loves you of course."
YOU ARE RIGHT!OH MY GOD I FEEL SO TOUCHING!
Rei loves Minako forever!
And Minako loves Rei too!Yay! |
 Vilandra 2004-10-20 . chapter 1 great story, hope to see more of your work |
 Jess Tiggs 2004-10-19 . chapter 1Really good story. I liked how you did the different perspectives. I think you captured each of the girls reactions to Rei very well.
'cept for I haven't seen that episode yet *L* so I can only imagine. Not that you're the first author without a spoiler warning. ;)
Keep up the good work. ^_^ |
 DoOdLEs 2004-10-19 . chapter 1 pretty interesting! in the PGSM, did minako really die or is dis juss an A/U? |
 Kyouryoku Senshi 2004-10-19 . chapter 1Excellent job, Very in character with the thoughts of each senshi, keep up the great work!^^ |