This story continues to suck me in. Looking forward to seeing what Yami has to say about Pilaf and his son calling a Yami no Game.

Lol. Funny really funny. So is Yugi's cousin hitting on Kaiba or is she just trying to loosen his tightwad ** up? God knows that boy needs to have fun every once in awhile. And in Kaiba's case I don't consider Duel Monsters as a way to loosen up. So when is Jianu going to meet Yami? Please update again soon!

this story looks like it could be a lot of fun to read lol hope to see more soon

This is cool, and very origional. ^__^ write more soon please, this is good.

i thought the eye that appears is the eye of horus
anyway, i look forward to your next update

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Anne McCaffrey is my favourite author
it's such a pity she wont let people write fan fiction on her books

My goals in for life in the order that i acquired them
to grow taller than my mum
to become a dragonrider
to become a garden of darkness
to make people acknowledge the fact that i am no longer in year seven! ( year nine finished last friday! i swear it!)

that kind of went of track
sorry for rambling

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'And while the Dragonball Guardians looked around in surprise at the darkness surrounding them, a low, evil laugh came from the small teenager in Jounouchi's arms. When he opened his eyes, they were crimson red. "You dare challenge ME to a Yami-no-Game?"

Sorry, that's just what ran through my head at the cliffhanger. Hell, I started to laugh when he said that!
Anyway, the actual review - please do not take any negative comments as 'flames'. I do not flame stories - if I don't like them I just don't review, okay? So take the fact that I am taking the time to write this as a compliment to your writing abilities.
This is a well written story. Your OC is well fleshed out and such, but to be perfectly frank she's overwhelming the other characters. Maybe not Yugi and Seto, but Jou and the rest are falling by the wayside - more importantly, because the Yugi-tachi could be considered secondary characters, you are pratically leaving out Yami no Yugi. He is a big part of the series and a big part of Yugi's life - and to be perfectly honest, he would have Shadow Gamed that first bully so fast his head would have spun. I realize it was a nice intro for your OC, but my point is that your OC is overwhelming the canon characters.
I like her. She is an interesting character. But you do need to work a little on the balancing act.
Now - on the good side...other than Yami no Yugi, you have the characterizations for the others spot-on, and that bit with Seto dumping pop on Jianu's head was hilarious. I kind of like Yugi having some latent psychic abilities as well. As I said before it is well written, and the pacing is good. Please continue, and remember that this is only my humble opinion. I am going to be putting this on my faves list so I can find out what happens!
Je ne!

Kewl. ^__^ I hope you put the DBZ characters in it. Please update soon. I like it.

DUDE YOU ROCK!! Coming out with a DBZ/YGO crossover fic. You dont see too much of them. I love DBZ and YGO. I will continue reading this, but I kinda want to see the chapters a little longer if thats not to much to ask. Later.

i think it is good, but a bit short. i was goin 2 put up a crossover that has a different storyline, but u beat me 2 it!

I think the main thing is 2 make it longer