*random review*
yea..i got confused in this chapter. s'ok though.

Well, about your grammar, it could use improving. So can your spelling. I stil like tis story though, the plot and characters have grab. Well, keep it up, and I hope you can update more often.

One word: Interesting. =D

Love the Gago. *squeezes Gareth* I love your characters, especially the ones from Devil's Mischief. One thing though, I'd love to know what the chapter titles displayed on the archive list/scrolly thing mean. ^^;;

I DID read "Lead me not into Tempation", but I'm lazy to review. XD I like it though. It's amusing, like that thiefbug with the nose-bleed. X3

Well, update when you can? ^_^ *tries to steal Gareth*

Write more. ^_^
Can't wait for the next chapter. :D

lolz... thx for the doll (?) Real nice chappie! Pls hurry up n update!

I meant nothing bad about the "not Ragnarok" comment from before, honest. I was simply classifying it as that because when I play Ragnarok, nothing ever seems as fun as the way you're putting it. I mean, you can tell it's Ragnarok by the names and classes and such, but at the same time, it's so much more complex than the world of Ragnarok. (It's meant in a completely good way, I promise.)

*holds on to the doll for a moment, blinking in turn, at the same time wondering who exactly "Fr. Matthew" is* Hm...I take it that you were, in fact, trying for some form of chaos? (If you are, that's great, since chaos is always fun to read and watch!)

Once again, your chapter is awesome. The...Priest, if he is truly a priest, leaves questioning room as to what his actual intentions are. It's fun to try to figure out, and even more fun to find out how off/close you are when the story continues.
^ ^

Can't wait to read your next chapter!

Hmm...liked the brief fight scene at the end and the introduction of additional characters as well as that short story somewhere in the middle. Still, I can't believe that a party of knights would ever be defeated by a party of thieves...

Some stuff now...

Game-wise, a yellow potion is stronger than an orange potion as it is made from two yellow herbs as opposed to the weaker orange that's made from one red and one yellow.

I've noticed that you derived "Malas" (unlucky or lazy) from "Malachuchi" (which somewhat sounds like Calachuchi) You could actually derive another word from Malachuchi (Mala as I noticed in the last chapter) Since it's derived from a longer word, Mala seems more like a prefix than an actual word. The closest word to that is "Mal", which is latin for bad or evil. You derive words like "Malice" "Malevolent" from that word. Certain names of devils in Dante's inferno actual have "Mala" or "Male" as part of names such as "Malacoda" (Evil tail) and "Malebranche" (Evil claws) Mala would seem to be in the same context if you have latin in your fic. That's just something I've noticed anyway. Keep writing!

About time I started reading and reviewing again...

I like the way you wrote this introduction chapter, brief and cute. I have a hard time doing cute but it seems natural to your writing style.The comedy is also good as you kept it in the background while you did the introductions. It's better than emphasizing it too much.

Some stuff now...

There's a slight tendency to exaggerate on your adjectives here though.

“I can’t believe it’s you! You look so handsome now!” Malas shouted with absolute happiness.

That seems to be an overeaction as it wasn't as if she last saw the kid being cornered by a horde of monsters or ten years ago. Unless its part of Malas's personality to overreact.

Ok...on to the next chapter.

*sniff sniff* I... LOST MY HUNTER DOLL!! T-T

drama aside, i can't stop laughing and one of my great aunts was laughing kasi nakita niya akong tumatawa. ampF /wah

eniweiss, Gago and Sala aren't brothers? O.o that's my bad... eheheh... *smiles sheepishly and tries to hide from sala*

yeah, i did enjoy my cameo. my cousin was laughing when he read this kasi kuhang-kuha mo raw yung pagka-immature ko. /heh

~eternally dreaming~
/gawi Annika Lee

From what I've read of your fanfiction so far, I must say that it's very well written. Your characters are very well thought out and together create a great effect on the reader. I also like the fact that this is a Ragnarok fanfiction, yet at the same time is NOT a Ragnarok fanfiction. It's so much different than the game that I can't completely classify it as "Ragnarok".

I like what you have for the storyline so far, and I'm interested to see what will happen in the gaps that have yet to be filled. Some characters seem to want to return, and I have strange feelings that they will, and that chaos will ensue more than once.

I really like what I've written so far, and I can't wait to see what happens next.

Nice story. I find the characters very interesting. Hope you update soon :)

sorry for the late review. i knew you'd be waiting for it. (read furor scribendi for further details. especially the footnote. that's the reason why i was late. gomen.)

anyway, the review. Lily White's sister looks like a Loli Ruri? I'm surprised, since their father is a GM... And what is their mom? BTW, I like her name. reminds me of the Xalascentia (sp?) clan from Tom Valor's trilogy. X3

A mysterious bard... and a strong one too. coincidence, since EA(of ateneo) has a bard which he uses to tank me. /heh Waitaminute... He's Gago and Sala's dad?! /omg *grabs her gago plushie and hugs it tight* no one steals my plushie! /pif

Once again, Gago does something... gago with a huge arbalest. Why am I not surprised? I pity Sala though. Why does he always take the brunt of Gago's kagaguhan? /swt

Mushy. Malas and Zy look mushy. And sweet! X3

I can't help but laugh at Gago's question: saan, sino at magkano? *laughs out loud* Dies, lima and san makes four. eh?

Gago is jealous... And what a nice outlet for his anger. *rotfl* BTW, in your CoAT drawing... I didn't get to see Gago! *hugs the plushie tighter* Oh and I think Frey is wafu. X3

A "dead" tarou + one jumpy alchemist (in Gago's terms, girly man. XD) = annika on the floor laughing her ** off. Whee~~ XD

okay, review for Flight goes for another day. my mom's making me sleep. (it's already quarter to 12. damn laundry. >

Wow. I love your story. You're a terrific writer, keep up the good work!

I'd also like to point out that in certain parts of the story, little words are left out which may redeem the sentence confusing. I also believe that Mages can't cast spells such as sense and storm gust... I think you're talking about the Wizard :P

Once again, keep up the good work. And don't forget to update!

Nice touch with the legend bit. It sort of reminds me of an anime I know...Eden's Bowy I think. Really sweet stuff...

Some stuff again...

For possessive forms of singular nouns, it's always 's, not just ' so it's Malas's.

For dialogue avoid abbreviations like Fr. Use the whole word so it's Father. It's okay for narration though...

Keep writing!

o... great story! pls hurry up n update!