Nice closing, enjoyed it a lot. Indeed, overall, a really good fun story.

Great wrap up to the battle. Really enjoyed it, and glad about who you chose to save the day.

Great chapter, although you seem to have lost the separators between the scenes, which made for some abrupt scene transitions (the switch to Kara and Faith, the switch from the SUV to the watchers surrounded) but, on the other hand, the typos were fairly minimal (the only one worth mentioning is that "the most experiences slayers" should be "the most experienced slayers").

Glad that I was right about the apparition, although I'm still not yet sure why the earlier mention of the character was necessary or how that ties in. Also, with both the apparition and Ozma, I'm not sure why they've both been quiet thus far and decided that now was a good time for them both to make their presences known. As it is, they just seemed like they were in the story for a bit of wish-fulfillment and so that you could reveal who they were, and, personally, I thought the story would have been better without them. Also, I thought it was established in the series that the dead couldn't be brought back if they died non-magically (I'm sure they phrased it better in the series) so I was a bit iffy about the resurrections. Having said that, you handled it great, with all the characters I was hoping to see (though I did at one point wonder if there was going to be a Buffy on both sides) so, despite my petty criticisms, chapterwise this was an overall winner.

Another groovy chapter. Liked the handling of Faith. Doing my best here to avoid spoilers, I'll just say that I think I know who the apparition is, but not sure how they managed to get that way. Good cliffhanger which makes me wish I currently had the time to continue reading.

The world would surely be a better place if every Buffy fic contained the line “Giles is our funky lovin’ party weasel.”

Another good chapter (nice to see that I was sort of right about the Slayer relatives being kidnapped. Presumably they needed Willow to perform the spell, although that would also mean Buffy and Co. wouldn't have been able to track them down, but I guess that wouldn't have been insurmountable). Curious to see who Ozma will turn out to be (hoping that the name's a double bluff and it's not going to be some metafiction where Ozma's revealed to be the writer, but I guess I'll find out soon).

Great chapter. Loved the "Something completely unexciting, even by librarian standards." line, but the best bit by far, which sort of eclipsed the ending and actually plucked at this hardened reviewer's emotions, was the bit near the end where Richard talked about being Kara's Watcher.

On the picky side, everybody's cell phones getting damaged seemed a bit coincidental, and (nothing to do with this chapter but I forgot to mention it for chapter 7) I'm surprised Willow didn't just teleport them all away from the bad guy, but these are ridiculously minor quibbles.

Have to say you did a good job of proofreading this time round (at a stretch I could point out "he's seen" might have been better as "he'd seen" or that the capitalisation on eBay was wrong but that's just because I'm pedantic).

Great chapter (although possibly too many fights at a time, with three suddenly turning up at once). For a second, I thought I'd spotted a pattern to the kidnappees with Robin and Dawn both being relatives of dead slayers (a bit tenuous with Dawn admittedly), but Willow sort of wrecks that theory, so I guess I'll just have to keep reading (which, fortunately, I was going to do anyway).

Yet another good chapter; liked Andrew's movie soundtrack insights and always nice to see a vampire nun. Slightly surprised that Faith knew that much about Tara (but maybe that's my fault and I just need to rewatch that body-swap episode).

Another great chapter. Liked the old friends, Cheeseman's last line, and especially the opening scene (really liked the description of the place and Buffy's reason for revisiting it).

Sad to hear that you didn't get this published, but on the plus side for me, it means I get to read it for free. Another good chapter (especially liked the first several lines of Buffy's part of the song) although I'm still trying to figure out why "English for Dummies" would have an English title; would its target audience even realise what it was? (I also find myself wondering what language it's written in)

Also, congratulations to your beta reader (or yourself) since the only mistake I could found this chapter was "she’s been wondering" which should have really been the past tense "she'd been wondering".

Another great fun chapter. The bad guys' plan sounds cool. Hope that slayer-detector technology doesn't fall into the wrong hands.

Just to be picky (since I can't find any fault with the story so far beyond the picky stuff), "duel processors" should be "dual processors", "Well discuss" should be "We'll discuss", and "Two hundred in the last century" should have been "Two hundred in the last millenium".

Great opening and I really like your choice of bad guys. Thought it was brave opening the story with an original character, but it worked, and your handling of the regular characters was right on the money. Interesting to see Andrew being the sensible one, and liked Xander's San Francisco Watchers comment.

If I was picky, I could say that italics might have been better-suited for indicating Kara's thoughts at the beginning rather than the underlining you used.

That was delightful. Everyone gets their happy ending, even those who are saying goodbye to ghosts.

I was beginning to really like Jason, so his sacrifice was a shocking surprise. It believably fueled Kara's attack. Dawn coming to the rescue was wonderful.

The battle is vividly described, and the cheery conversation being bandied about by the dead slayers makes it even creepier.