Reviews for Destiny's children

Reviews For: Destiny's children

Scarab Dynasty (you know th... 2005-06-06 ch 1, anon.	abuseUm... I think I'm blind. I never reviewed this! I must've read it, what? Three times? And I never reviewed. Well better late than never right? Anyway, I thought it was a nice story and well done. (Randy grins how cute!) It was different to many of the circulating fanon ideas about the Knights. Their opinion on Sparx was very typical of how I might have expected them to react to her both surprised and in the end "well what the heck". And the idea that she cut her hair to make herself appear older I liked. There's a Mulan ring to that. And they were automaticaly expecting it to be a guy... ha, showed them! I loved the style, enjoyed the fic... what more can I say? Nice one. :)
Lynxie 2004-11-10 ch 13,	abuseInteresting. A good read.
hyperpsychomaniac 2004-11-01 ch 13,	abuseTerrific story! Really well written. I think you may have called Randy Random once somewhere though. If your meaning he changed his name later on you might want to fix that. But great story, I really enjoyed it and I like that you update so quick.
Blue-Inked Frost 2004-11-01 ch 13,	abuseUm, nice story, I'm sorry that you're finished! I thought the chandelier thing was pretty ingenious; a trifle contrived but necessary... How much of this story is your imagination and how much from canon sources? (Just curious, I enjoyed reading this very much.) Do you know any more characters' ages (my email is on my profile page)? Interesting that Ace "I've never flirted before" is so old... Anyway, I can't really comment more than, great story, well done.
Blue-Inked Frost 2004-10-30 ch 10,	abuseI liked the way you introduced the villains--the little pig made me smile, and the witty banter and the morphing was really well done. Vaguely dubious on the idea of clubs triumphant, but I understand the Plot Reasons. Keep spell-checking, a few little errors though overall it's well written. Were you having problems with She-Who-Apparently-Lacks-A-First-Name? Seems strange to spell it in full all the time, yet, what else?
Blue-Inked Frost 2004-10-28 ch 8,	abuseCool, I really like the way you jumped into the plot here. This is very well written with great characterisations. You've probably got a Plot Point planned for this, but doesn't Ace fly?
Blue-Inked Frost 2004-10-27 ch 6,	abuseOh, I liked the hair thing, and the moment of personal decision. You like Sparks, don't you? Anyway, you write her well.
Blue-Inked Frost 2004-10-27 ch 5,	abuseI liked your Sparks backstory. Variant of the "street brat made good" theme? More backstory would be interesting, though probably unnecessary... I can't complain about the Strong Female Character aspect, though IMO she's the weakest and bravest of the Knights... No romance between her and Salvatore, I presume? I thought you got her attitude down pat. Nice story. Thanks for fixing the "ands".
hyperpsychomaniac 2004-10-27 ch 3,	abuseO! Getting good. I like the irony in that statement about not being able to trust each other. Very well done.
Blue-Inked Frost 2004-10-25 ch 3,	abuseWow, you work fast. I like the way you brought Sparks in, though I'm a little dubious about the gorgeous long hair (nice description though, not to mention Ace's fringe). I guess your society is "male dominated"? I think you have some lovely ideas here and I am very interested. I do think, though, that running spellcheck might help, there were a few little mistakes, eg. "Lightning Knight's base" when, since the noun's plural, the apostrophe should be after the "s". I found the use of the & symbol rather than the word a bit irritating. Do you have a beta reader? On a personal level, the nickname "Randy" caused me to giggle, though this is just the result of a dirty mind and Australian culture. Your OCs seem to integrate well, though I'm far more interested in the canon characters. I really liked your Lord Fear (II) origin story.
hyperpsychomaniac 2004-10-25 ch 2,	abuseRandy! That's so cute!

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