Chapter 1: Be Careful What You Ask For...
It was very much female to his surprise (and horror); the good thing was, he did not feel any odango hairstyles, so Shampoo was definitely out.
[As her hair is long enough to tell relatively quickly, wouldn’t this be something he could discern extremely quickly?]

That would be... weird, for reasons which he could not think of at the moment; his head felt like it was splitting down the middle.
[Why the sudden jump from ‘who’s not in his arms’ to ‘his headache’? I’d think the latter would be the first thing he’d feel, and then somebody against him would be second]

Ranma would have very well fell over.
[fallen?]

"What are fighting about?"
[are _we_?]

Ranma considered getting Tofu to recommend a surgeon to sew his mouth shut. Every time he opened it, something bad invariably occurred.
[Seems like.]

Habiki’s eye twitched uncontrollably.
[Nabiki]

she may have sounded calm and rational, but her body language was throwing out more screams and expletives than a ship of drunken sailors. Tears welled in her eyes like lakes on the verge of flooding during the rainy seasons.
[While this borders on ‘purple prose’, I find it extremely funny]

death looking to gain its pound of flesh.
[I didn’t know that death sought a pound of flesh]

Chapter 2: Aftermath Before Math
Kasumi said, snapping the pin shut onto the linen, imprisoning it on the line.
[There’s a strange fitting to that word choice]

Nabiki less than annoyed by anything.
[_more_ than annoyed?]

you won't do anything wrong with my daughter, will you, son?" His expression intensified, the well-developed arm growing taunt around the young man's neck.
[There’s something extremely amusing about this despite the gravity of the situation]

They stood out against the darkness, their furs black as onyx.
[If they’re black, how do they stand out from black darknes?]

Or did you forget that I'm a selfish bitch?"
He frowned. "And I think I gotta make that title longer, now."
[There’s something harsh yet fitting about that]

I don't what's wrong
[don’t _know_]

sadly holding
[Missing comma after ‘sadly’]

Instead, his mind went into Automatic Response Mode
[Excellently put]

And how delicate his fingers were in his cursed body.
[This came out of no-where, and seriously disrupts a very serious scene that I think is supposed to be one contiguous dramatic period]

He started to glare at her, but decided it wasn’t worth the effort.
[Appropriate, certainly]

he saw her still standing, her foot not touching the ground.
[That makes it sound like either foot is off the ground, saying ‘one foot not touching’ would’ve been clearer]

a girl with ash black hair tied up in a one-sided ponytail dressed in a uniform in which the jacket clearly marked her as being a student of St. Hebereke
[Simple, clear, and creating an eerie sense of foreboding just by putting her into the scene]

Chapter 3: Sex Lies on Videotape
Moments passed, silence running amok in the kitchen.
[Unusual, and yet something I could easily see]

“I mean by anyone else?”
She sounded almost… accepting of the offhand accusation.
That unnerved him for reason he could not explain at the moment.
[It’s definitely a change]

really about…
[Missing closing quotes]

the put then back
[then put them?]

Blackmail tends to only make my husband
[The ‘only’ seems superfluous]

Ranma looked around the room as if there was another guy with whom he just happened to share the same name.
[Funny]

“If you’re wondering about the bet, the twenty-five thousand yen was not placed on a whim.”
[I’m not sure what the italic formatting is for, because it seems this line is part of the immediate narrative and no flashback or other strange circumstance, but the point still comes through. Although I’d have automatically discounted this story idea as a possibility that could never really work, you’ve done a surprising job of presenting Nabiki and Ranma and making it plausible. Making Kasumi a sort of antagonist is also an interesting twist that, while completely unexpected, does not come across as implausible.]

This was my favorite chapter so far. You spelled out Nabiki's fears of being a damsel in distress quite well. I liked that she was on the verge of blackmailing Ranma again because sometimes it takes a few tries for a lesson to sink in.

Ranma actually said something that defused the tension for once! The interaction between him and Nabiki is very entertaining, and I think a relationship between them could be fun now that they don't 'despise' each other quite so much.

Very awesome and heartfelt.
I happened upon this story when there was only 1 chapter, years and years ago.
Thought it was a very interesting concept.
But reading it in its fullest really brings the feelings out.
The ending has a sort of tranquility to it.

I'm familiar with this story from somewhere, I don't remember where, though. But I know I read this fanfic years ago, maybe it was here? I hate to forget things like that.

Still, I'm glad that I found it again; it is as amazing as I remembered and as good a read as it was before. Very well written and thought, I was pulled in by the story and couldn't stop reading until I finished, very few authros manage to do that with me, so I must congratulate you for it.

This story is a triumph, and I want you to know it is an honour to add it to my favorites.

Well, some things were rather sudden, and IMHO OOC some times. But overall good fic.

Man, It is so sad...

This is probably one of the better Ranma/Nabiki matchup stories I've read, and very well-written, too. I want a sequel. :)

An amazing story especially in the middle of this epic I was a little... scared for Ranma and Nabiki when I Read the part of the videotape of their wedding night. And also just astounded in the ways you are able to really flesh out everyone even down to a minor characters, imo, like Kasumi. To really make me sit on the edge of my seat feeling all these emotions as I read really defines the difference between a writer and a WRITER. Hopefully you keep on doing such an amazing job. Good luck in your future.

This is very, very, very good!
It's rare to see a believable, and in-character, Ranma and Nabiki match.
The plot really is fascinating, twisting the canon event of Ranma's brief engagement to Nabiki into such a story with a manipulative Kasumi and muderous/broken Shampoo... really, just excellent.

A highly believable Nabiki/Ranma matchup. Well done.

Wow. This was nearly good enough to get on my favorites list, and I guard that well. Another chapter of fluff would have clinched it.

The characterizations were perfect, except Kasumi, but of course that was intentional. The thoughts and feelings felt real, and the dialog seemed right. You also had enough adversity in there.

Excellent job. =)

Bravo, a fic well written... Only thing I'm a little peeved about is not knowing whether or not Nabiki is pregnant! Curse you! :p

pretty cool so far.

Even though it was slightly tragic it was utterly beuatiful.

-Dani.

wow that was quite a chapter! seems like the story is starting to wrap up. though there are quite a few loose ends so i can't wait to see what comes next.