Reviews for The Tennis Game

Joe's girl
2004-10-27
ch 1,

abuseWell written, well thought out story. Your characterizations are realistic as is your dialogue. Thank you, thank you, thank you for editing so well. (One of my pet peeves is bad spelling and grammar.)I have read some of your other fanfics and like the Jack/Barbara relationship.

If I had a complaint...I found the transition from the courtroom to Barb in the babies' nursery difficult to follow. I didn't know why she was there, if this was part of a custody agreement or, at first, how much time had passed. I thought that could have been clearer. I also was not crazy about the epilogue. The story had been so intense and serious, the humor at the end seemed out of place.

Please take my 'complaints' with a grain of salt. I otherwise loved the story. Hope to see more from you.

bobdabuilder0804
2004-10-27
ch 1,

abuseAmazing :)

Just had to leave a review here to let you know how much I appreciate your stories, and your comments even more, LOl! Looking forward to more Times of his Life, and the new one Ive herd (or read) you talking about.

Keep writing, Sent

Chloe :)

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