 Vams 2008-07-15 . chapter 45 First off, I read the review below and now I know how to cuss in here. Thank f_ucking God!! I can review normally.
So the important stuff...
Yeah, so everything seems to be grinding slowly to the end here. You've been doing such a good job at keeping this last quarter of the story exciting. It's like an action movie with an hour final fight sequence (where's the boat chase?)I'm exhausted from it, which is good, you've got me there with them. That's the pro emotions working there.
As for plot, I loved Katerina citing a past mistake to excuse a future one. Drama, drama, drama. I know some of her future from Act10...you've began to lead there well, at least her and Kenny's relationship-wise. I feel more spite in her than actual caring for Kenny right now...but it works well for her character. I want to see an update on Act10 so I can see where it goes.
You've again fixed my mistake and created a little rivalry for Genta and Julian. Small, yes, but it pleases my continuity OCD.
Now we've got Ryu, Kenny, and Ken vs. Akuma and Genta. Sh_it...new Shadow Technology, in front of Akuma. You got some room for this battle. It's going to be epic. Not that the battles in this chapter weren't...just, if this is the beginning, I can only imagine how this is going to pan out.
In the meantime...you've left my fav Cammy in limbo...and where's Cranky? In the jet? It's been a while...check in on them why don't you?
This was a great chapter, I want you to update more and more but them I'm sad it's almost over with...you'd just better continue the rest. I'll be updating soon...kinda having a lag here, but this has got me moving a little. Good job again. Later. |
 Metal Harbinger 2008-07-15 . chapter 45Good to see Kenny back and kicking a_ss again, but man him and Ryu better really get their s_hit together if they're going to survive this fight! Go get 'em boys! |
 Ominae 2008-07-15 . chapter 45 Pretty impressed with Rita doing anti-poison countermeasures...
And yeah, SF4's coming out alreayd. |
 Metal Harbinger 2008-04-27 . chapter 44This scene appears to be reminiscent of that old fic you discontinued a while back. I forget what it's called, but it was some kind of fic after that other one you ended that was the original sequel to "The Successor" where Demitri and Akuma team up and take over the world (or something like that I don't remember exactly) and then Kenny and Cranky had just been beaten down and were resolving to kick Akuma's ** once and for all.
Oh well, it was a good scene and really works to pass the time in between. Hopefully Kenny comes back strong and ever to lay the smack down on Genta's candy **! |
 Ominae 2008-04-21 . chapter 44 Not bad stuff. Like the drama. |
 Vams 2008-04-18 . chapter 44 I was ready for action abudant and here I get an interlude? No worries. It was great. A lot has been going on, it's good to see a little character development worked in. I love how you're taking such time to develop Kenny and Cranky's relationship, especially Cranky's guilt about letting Kenny go. He just needs to understand that if Kenny hadn't gone with Ryu they probably would have found him anyway and both he and Cranky would probably be dead. Still, such a nice touch. Don't think you're off the hook here, I want more... |
 Metal Harbinger 2008-04-08 . chapter 43FINALLY...THE NOC HAS COME BACK TO !
Oh man Kenny's really screwed now, but knowing you I'm sure this is probably only the beginning of something else, something that will hopefully prevent him from dying before our very eyes.
That sucks what happened to Issei too, but at least he went down fighting like a true warrior and good to see Katarina strike a blow of revenge upon those Shadowlaw freaks.
It was also good to see Wagner and Juli get back at Balrog and see Julian making Vega scream like a **...oh I always celebrate whenever somebody kicks Vega's femmy **!
I'm still iffy about Genta though, I'm sure this isn't the end of him either. |
 Vams 2008-04-06 . chapter 43 This chapter was different from anything I've ever seen you write before. So depressing, so painful...was that what I've been making you feel with my angsty stories all this time?
I must admit, you floored me with Aaron's death, I was initally kinda disappointed it happened so quickly, but then Katerina, her change, so subtle, so quick, but what a development. I guess you really are leading towards the end here.
I really am having a hard time finding words here. Kenny and Julian's fights are so...gritty. The desperation is overwhelming. Like I said, me of all people struggling to find words. I just, woah. More later, e-mail maybe. My mind is going a mile a minute... |
 Ominae 2008-04-05 . chapter 43 Haven't reviewed in a while, but the stuff looks good. |
 Vams 2007-11-17 . chapter 42 So, here I am working on my long due next chapter. I come to check some random detail from your story and I discover this chapter. WTF? A nice suprize though.
I have to start off by metioning a tiny detail right at the end. ("where's Dorian?!" Julian roared.) That caught me for some reason. It's just so perfect. So much emotion created by just one simple word. I also love Kenny throwing the rock at Genta and calling him fugly. It's been too long without some original Kenny's voice.
It sure didn't take long for all the fighter to get separated into nice little clots. If only I had your talent for dealing with so many characters at once. Working on it though.
I'm really excited to see how these fights pan out. There hasn't ever really been a good Julian/Vega fight. =) I hope Cammy and Cranky are going to get into the action, too.
I see it's been a while. Hopefully your juices will get flowing, this chapter has helped me. |
 Vammy 2007-07-20 . chapter 41 Holy crap! How'd I miss this for so long? It was definitely my loss waiting so long...such excitement here.
It was amazing that I was overwhelmed with the feeling of an epic battle and not one punch was actually described in the inital description of Bison vs. Ryu. Execellent writing.
Finally Kenny's broken down, it's long overdue. Taking after his big bro it seems. =) And I guess if anyone else understands rage it would be Julian. I always like how you put such subtle emotional things in your chapters. Juli being worried about Cranky, knelt by his side, said so much with so little.
The twins seem so cold all the sudden, reality must be taking a toll. Kinda neat to look at the situation after the inital dramatic emotions, adds a real aspect to everything. Julian's rather calm about just missing Dorian, maybe hiding something, an explosion later on? I'm intrigued.
What an entrance for Akuma, This battle is about to get even more explosive.
I'm sad about the end approaching, but excited to see how things turn out, how you work things into place. I just love how the stories click together so well, it adds yet another intresting aspect to the mix.
This has got me pumped... |
 Ominae 2007-07-05 . chapter 41 The Ryu/Bison match had me psyched up real good! |
 Metal Harbinger 2007-07-02 . chapter 41Good to see Kenny finally get his revenge on Genta, sneaky bastard had it coming.
Once again, more great scripted drama and a great confrontation going down between Ryu and Bison, also liking the effect with the spectators dropping like flies, really creating some messed up **. Akuma is there now, so really looking forward to what happens there. |
 Metal Harbinger 2007-04-10 . chapter 40After a LONG hiatus, welcome back buddy.
Once again this was a very well written chapter and you really made me get behind Kenny with him wanting to bring down that smug, sadistic bastard Genta.
You also described Cammy's anguish really well and if you've got even one of Bison's employees fearing him, then you know you've crafted a believable villain.
Good work and hopefully the real world won't keep you from a speedy update next time around. |
 Vams 2007-04-09 . chapter 40 Hell, even the announcer is afraid of Bison...or is it someone else? I liked this (especially since it's an update a year in the making) The Cammy/Bison fight scene was like nothing I've ever seen you write before...less describing of the action and more thoughts and feelings (both emotional and physical) it was a really neat and effectitive way to do this fight, it put you there physically AND emotionally while staying exciting, not an easy task. Cammy's self-realization was unexpected, but pivotal, she may have gotten her ** beaten, but she grew up a lot.
And now to the clearing...WOW...so much emotion with so little words...I love, love, love it. Cranky raising his head from the ground to mouth the word "run" was just...it said so much. Now as long as Kenny doesn't get his ** totally beat the crew should be fine. Wagner, Julian and Ken should have some fight left in them...maybe Kenny won't need them...I guess it's yet to be seen.
No more years between updates here...get this finished up and then continue your other SF fic...get back to business...after reading this i've got a few ideas flowing. I might update soon too. =) Later |
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