 Andrea 2007-02-15 . chapter 4 love it! no offense but there are grammatical errors...alot of them...but i still love it!^_^ ^_^
^_^ ^_^ ^_^ :) :) :) :) :):) :) |
 lone-wolf 2006-07-23 . chapter 4 u didnt update for over a year plz hurry |
 naonaonao 2006-04-15 . chapter 4Aw! That was one of the cutest things I've ever read! I loved it! Write more! |
 Anime/Manga lubber 2005-07-05 . chapter 4 *stares blankly* yes grammar errors...but...that doesn't change the cuteness factor!...GO YOU!! |
 VentMonster 2004-11-14 . chapter 4good story update soon! |
 Acme Crazy Fool 2004-11-12 . chapter 4Grammar's fine, I don't really notice it. This is a good relationship building type story, though it doesn't really fit in to the real storyline where Naruto hardly seems to know Hinata, however please don't think I'm a criticizer, the writing style is good, please continue to update! |
 Embrace nothing 2004-11-12 . chapter 4hey great story hope u keep it up |
 Gopu 2004-11-12 . chapter 4 Great chapter |
 lukeluke 2004-11-12 . chapter 4Your story is not bad until now, it's just that I don't feel that I'm in the story. Maybe that's because your chapters are very short, the story doesn't flow enough. What is in chapter 4? Hinata sneaks out and go eat a ramen bowl with Naruto, end of the chapter... Longer chapter will catch my attention and my interest more, feeling a lot more in the story. But that's your story so you do what you want! :-) It's only my opinion. |
 Dragon Man 180 2004-11-12 . chapter 4Chibis so cute, but when will the big bad Neji appear and ruin the happiness and innocence they share? |
 HiNATAhimeCHAN 2004-11-06 . chapter 3Cute story, please continue! |
 warprince2000 2004-11-02 . chapter 3Cool story! can't wait to see what happens in the next chapter (update soon Plz) |
 Gopu 2004-11-01 . chapter 3 Good chapter |
 Strockrow 2004-11-01 . chapter 3 Work on having this proofread. the Grammar in the second chapter , ay least in some parts, hurt my head.
P.S: I hate the present when telling stories, but that's just me. |
 Nikikeya 2004-11-01 . chapter 2Nikikeya- OMG that's soo cute NaruHina i didn't really like the part about Hina's mother dying but other than that it's good Might need to spellcheck though >. |