Very well done, and quite enjoyable.

wow...that's all i can say...
wow...

Wahh! So sad! Good job on this... I'd love to see more, even though I know it's a one-shot.

Hah, I thought Zel's actions towards that girl seemed a little too OOC for him, but I guess you explained it in the end.

Very good. Very fluffy, but good.