To be honest- my feelings here are mixed on the story itself. But before I delve into that- let's start with the more mechanical side of writing.
You did well overall. I noticed you got better and better with your writing as you went along! That's good- that means you were able to build upon yourself. The only thing I advise you work on is clarity a bit. Things get a bit cluttered here and there- and notes in the bars won't always suffice. Though you didn't seem to rely on them much- which is a good thing. But just try and break it down a little. Wipe everything but the single moment from your mind and think of it- make it as crystalline clear as you can.
While as keeping in character- this is where it is mixed a bit. You captured more of the original Beast from Beauty and the Beast (as in the written tale)in here than in the Disney version. Though it could be argued that this is canon still since he did change in the end- he seemed gentler. Belle doesn't get enough time to judge too much- but you got her gentile in there so no complaints. But the enchantress seems out of character... She is supposed to be a wise, noble figure. But then again- it's Fan Fiction and she is a pretty flat character as is so you just added dimension to her- gave her emotions. Again, my feelings here are mixed- but overall, it stands pretty well on its own!
Hope this helps!
~Finn

aww, good story

you're confusing.

aw man i love your stories theyre so cute! im an obsessive beauty&the beast fan and this was just so fun to read...keep on being an awesome writer yuinie! ^.-

Hi, i'm belle (I know real ironic). I loved your story. I only got confused at the evil brother part. But otherwise it was a great story. You should continue and write about their first baby. name It genevieve. I think that name is great! Anyways, I love your story and my friends love it too. I cant wait to read more of your stories!

*~ Belle~*

Aw, that was a beautiful ending! I loved this whole story, it was amazing, really! I hope you DO get the chance to write more, because I'll definately read it!

Soo good. I was a little confused about the whole enchantress/evil brother situation. I think the evil brother was the enchantress? But then why would she remind him of his former life? So confused. But I am sometimes a little slow...

hey, ducky,
well, its finished, lol
it wa sgreta, hope to read more of yrs in the future
ttfn and keep it up
^_^

yeah...they meet again
i didnt expect her to remember him...i thought the strange man would have taken care of that
nm
keep it up
ttfn
^_^

oh
me like
yr giving the anchantress a lot of personality, quite cool
she istn just a bland character to lead him around...its taking ages to get there though,
ttfn
^_^

CONGRATS!

That was a great story, you really got me hanged on to it. However, i do agree that you might have finished it off to quickly. Comparingly to the rest of the story, these last few chapters were a bit more confusing. However, i think you dont a great job and i can't wait to hear more batb related stories!!

good luck with school and all the rest!

- Nikki

I'm really sorry, this just doesn't work for me. I truly hate to be negative, especially when you were so kind in your comments on my story! But the characterizations here just don't fit with the movie. Take the Enchantress: In the movie, she was wise, meting out justice. Here she's evil and creepy and wants the prince for herself. It makes no sense! If she wanted the prince for herself, why did she cast the original spell on him, then stand back and let Belle fall in love with him, and he with Belle? Why didn't she come to the castle HERSELF pretending to be another girl (before Belle did), fall in love with him herself, and break the spell? Then she would have had him to herself, without Belle ever being involved at all. Also, the prince would never go along with the idea that "We'll fight for Belle, and the winner gets her." That's treating Belle like an object, a trophy to be won - which is exactly the attitude that Gaston had, which is one of the reasons she HATED Gaston. The prince is the good guy who truly loves Belle, so he should treat her as a person with rights and feelings, and ask her what SHE wants to do. I'm really sorry, I'm not trying to flame you or anything, I'm just trying to be honest. I do thank you for your kind words about my story.

The enchantress is getting kind of creepy... but everyone has a creepy side, right?
Arg! I must know what happens soon!
And I hope your mind stops spasming soon. ^_^

NO! Is the enchantress evil? I don't like that at all. She was the GOOD part of it all, the NICE sibling. Otherwise, good.

hmm... actually i had already imagined what would happen to your story before you changed this last chapter. However, I have to congratulate you on your fabulous writing. I hope your mind stops having spasms on this story very soon, cause i'm really anxious to see what happens.

Btw, if you're interested in hearing my ideas on the story, email me at nikkibelle18@