ur a talented writer ur 2 chapters really put an impression on me

how sad!Kyo was way too harsh!Akito was way to mean!I wanted to kick kyo for herting her like that!Kagura loves him SO MUCH!

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hey jen! i rele like the story! keep writing!

hey, cute fic!! plz update REELY SOON!

MORE MORE MORE! OH PLEASE WRITE MORE!

man i loove kyo/kagura fics so darn much but theres never any of em!

mORE~

gr kyo is sucha cold bastard *POUT* kagura is sucha wonderful girl but kyo is so cruel to her! whats so great about tohru anyways?!

Ouch it hurts my heart and breaks it into two, I can't wait for the next chapter!!

^^; Okay easy on the caps lock. You don't have to caps lock all the yelling lines. You can actually just use terms like...

s/he bellowed
s/he roared
of course yelled and shouted work as well.

The narration was slightly better in this chapter but it still could use work. And well I'm not so sure you should ignore chapter 97 of the manga. You see only a small select few know Akito is really a woman. Kagura, Kyo and Yuki are not among that group. You could use Akito's true gender as a plot device within your story. Of course it is your story, I'm only making a suggestion. Good luck with your next chapter, you're doing well.

^^; Kyo's Triad? I think you mean Kyo's tirade. A Triad is like a type of illegal organization similiar to the mob.

I certainly like the idea around the story but the narration is sounding kind of awkward at points and well you have some grammar and spelling errors. I suggest that you go another round of proofreading or maybe find yourself a beta reader who can help you fix the flow issues.

On the plus side everyone was pretty well in character, that's always good. If you work on your narration, the grammar problems and fix up the spelling errors I think you will have yourself a wonderful story. So far so good.

I love you I love you I love you!! Tee hehe ... Kyou and Kagura forever! ^_^

Hey, this great. I would like to see what going to happen soon!

Wonderful story.Oh yeah,one thing,MY alter-ego wishs to tell you something.One moment please...
Kyoko(Alter-ego):A PITCHFORK!HA!I HAVE A SWORD WITH ME!I'L BEAT YOU IN BATTLE LONG BEFORE YOU STAND A CHANCE EVEN AGAINST KEOSO!(airheaded alterego)
Keosis-chan:I'm cursed with 2 alter-egos,and sorry for Kyoko,she's evil.10/10 on your story.

My goodness he is such a bastard! How dare he! (satified?) Ok wow , man this story is awesome, but please don't make it an epic, people get bored with them and move on. I felt Kyo was a jerk too, but he's often like that so (+) for keeping everybody in character. Oh yeah, finally more K+K stories Hooray! I remember about 7 months ago when there were like zip! 10 months ago it was like nobody heard of such a pairing. So keep it up and write the next chapter soon please!

Hey, this great. I lover reading Akito/Kagura/Kyo fic! Please oh please update soon! I can't wait to see what going to happen when Kagura meets Akito!

I love Kagura centered fics. I'm doing one myself. =)