Ah, so simple, so purely adolescent. . .yet, that’s what makes it perfect. In reading the short sentence fragments, feeling them slip so quickly through my mind, I am also aware of the labor that produced them, the struggles to say just the right thing. The words are just enough to start something, but they never go anywhere, and I can feel Pansy’s frustration rising with each new line (while I, on the other hand, enjoy her trial very much; perhaps due to a trace of schadenfreude, but mostly because it’s so well done.) The beauty of it is that the writing does not depend on the reader really knowing Pansy or Draco, but rather draws on experiences everyone (or at least all girls) goes through at some point in life.
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Here, in her distress, Pansy has thrown together a rather haphazard jumble that is trying to be something, but it’s obvious that you, dear authoress, have put a great deal into the wording. The ending, I think, is just right, carefully phrased to convey the emotions. Pansy has been “disappointed” and is “annoyed”, of course, but she isn’t really bitter. She doesn’t resort to words as strong as “enraged” or “hate”, and her reactions are childishly impulsive: wishing forget, calling him names. It’s not the type of emotion that will last; there’s a stronger emotion that is sure to overpower it eventually. She is far from pleased at the moment, obviously, but even in that, you’ve teased from her unwitting pen a trace of an admission of affection, and I love it.
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It’s been a while since I came across a story that snatched my attention and demanded at wandpoint a place on my Favorite Stories list, but, well, then I read this. Well done.

Interesting little drabble, nicely written.

Interesting and somewhat humorous although I'm not sure I quite understand it entirely. Perhaps I am missing something; I will re-read it a few more times.

thats cute. :)

That's an interesting little "drabble".

it´s very interesting! i thought it was quite original!

lol that was nice, really liked it