I've read the story twice now. I like it. But I am confused as to why Kevin would need assistance using the restroom. At his level of injury he should easily be able to cath on his own. If it is because the sink and the toilet were split then he could have solved that on his own. Most people who use catheters and are active away from home use pre-packaged catheters that are sterile and pre-lubed. I definitely do not think Kevin would want help cathing after saying he didn't want anyone to hold the door open for him. You also said that Kevin tries to cath mostly at home. That doesn't make any sense because he has a job. He spends a lot of time away from home. Do you expect him not to empty his bladder while at work? You show his independence but then you take it away. The same thing with Beth, bringing the toothbrush and paste to the bed. To me that is like holding the door open. Kevin could easily get up and go to the bathroom. I see Beth more as a mother and not a lover in that seen. After seeing Kevin's character in the television show, this fan fiction character of Kevin is a little off. I really don't think Kevin would appreciate being treated as if he is a child. It has been a while since he and Beth have seen each other. I think Kevin's character would want Beth know that he is an independent man. Do you want Kevin to be independent or dependent? I know it makes a good story but I think you need to pick and choose.


When Beth takes Kevin's shoes off while he is half asleep, I don't think he would necessarily be "freaked out" because he didn't notice his shoes had been taking off because of lack of sensation. By that time he has lived with his injury long enough to be used to his body. Maybe you could use another phrase like "surprised". I don't know but "freaked out" is a phrase that shouldn't be used.

One more thing.
It is implied that Kevin cannot have children BECAUSE of his injury. I think you should explain his diagnoses because it makes it seem like any other man with a SCI would not be able to have children either.

I really did like your story but those are the things that made Kevin seem unreal. I'm not asking you to change your story but maybe just think about these things, do a little more research to get the story straight.

Oh my God! This is by far the best fanfic (and I read a lot of them) I have EVER read. The characters, the language, your style of writing: everything is PERFECT...
I'm still fascinated. Wow.

Sorry I have been so remiss with my reviews these past fiew chapters, you've been too fast for me! But now i finally took the time to finish this up, and I'm glad I did. Your writing continues to impress as always, and even though I'm sad that this is finished I'm looking forward to whatever you decide to write next. Keep up the fantastic writing, it's been fun to see you improve throughout this story and I'm sure you will continue to do so.

Amazing!! That was definately one of the best stories on this site!! If you do decide to write another please make a sequel to this!

Nice ending. I like it, that you left most plots open. I also liked it a lot, that Beth promised Kev her support, whatever he'd decide (It was obvious that he would decide to go for the procedure - who wouldn't? He'd just keep wondering "what if" for the rest of his life, if he didn't). And most of all I loved the introduction of Paul Quinn... Yes I did :).
One more on the "sci-fi crap". I give you credit of "knowing better" since you're closer to the medical departament, but I'm far from believing in any major changes in ten years time in anything. People said we'd be on Mars by the year 20, and here we are in 2005, and... The same goes to cure for AIDS, cancer, and paralisys. The progress is being made of course, and that's for the better. The lives of sick and injured people are getting easier, more lives are saved. And medicine will cure all that in time. But ten years seems too optimistic to me. And also there is a difference between the newly injured, who will probably be treated sooner and more effectively than those injured years and years ago. You mentioned that - I noticed.
I've written too much ;). Okey, over with that.
Are you planning on writing some other fanfic now? If it's about Kevin, I'm going to check it up also :)
Happy writing - yannik-

Wow I must say you had me sitting on the tip of my chair there for almost the entire concluding chapter. I like you, think that K/B made the perfect couple and really enjoyed how you portraied them in the future. I have been following the development with stemcells, with more than average curiosity as I have several friends with SCI- last news I heard was in April, was that in 70% of the cases were stemcells were injected, tumors would develop and that was the major thing holding back treatment at the moment.

Well, that was great. I really enjoyed your story from start to end. It was an awesome end to an awesome story. I really liked your author notes as well. Thankyou for sharing and good luck for the future! Love Em

Wow what a way to end this chapter, Luke and Kevin bonding like that and Luke telling Kevin that he will have him walking again- absolutely breath taking!
I also loved the fact that you had God talking to Kevin-wonder how that will influence Kevin's future as well as everyone connected to him.

I so love how you mentioned the boat as I think it had a leading role throughout JoA, as it was one of the reasons Kevin got out of his shell and grabbed a life after the Girardi's move to Arcadia and it had a role as a people bonder as well. I like how you keep us in suspense on the outcome of J/A staying together or breaking up.
BTW thank you for reviewing my story- I am working on the next chapter, alas work get in the way of my writing time.

Oh my gosh!! This is so awesome!! I can't wait for the next chapter!!

I am not sure if I want to see this story end. I am having a good time reading it sice the begining.
On the "walk again" thing, I know that there are many many people working to find a cure for SCI, and trully hope to see one someday. It is not going to be a get up and walk recovery, but it will happen with a lot of hard work.

An interesting turn with Joan and God. Not very much in-character, but still very sweet. Besides - who knows what character God really has? ;) And your pointing out that HE explained everything to Kev, while he never did to Joan was nicely justifying his behaviour.
I'm not sure about the "you'll walk again" twist though. I remember Barbra Hall's declaration, that Kev will not walk on the show, and well... the show didn't last all that long, but... I don't know... this IS the ‘sci-fi crap that they come up with’. It's good though, that Kev is prepared that this may not work out. I'm curious how you're planning on wrapping up this story.
Have fun writing!
-yannik-

Wow. Cool as man. Was that the end? Or is there more to come? Awesome. Love your stuff!

This story just gets better and better! i don't want it to end! Keep up the awesome writing!

One more time a very enjoyable reading.