It was amazing! You stayed true to the characters!

Very sweet. I have to agree that Kenshin being sick has more meaning. Not only is it portrayed as often in fanfiction but Kenshin is rarely there to see Kaoru's pain. Using his sickness would help him realize Kaoru's affection and dedication towards him. Very good one- shot. Ja ne!

such fluff! such cuteness!
what many one-shots should be. ^^

Awed...that was,that was (I was spechless) that was CUTE.Love this story.It SO going to my fav list ^_^ hope you can write a WAFF story like this in future.Ganbate

yes indeed it was so kawwaii!!

THis is an awsome story. Kenshin and Kaoru are in character perfectly! Hooray!

Nice, sweet and just the right waffy-ness. I really enjoyed it. :D

Aw!! that was super cute! And your English is definitely better than most authors! Congrats, you've made my day!

Luv ya!
cherry

Aww.. Very sweet! Wonderfully done.

Aww.. cute and funny. Short, yes, but cute. ^_~

WAH! SO CUTE! I LOVE IT! I LOVE IT LIKE THE MONKEY LOVES THE BANANA! YES, THAT IS HOW MUCH IT IS LOVED, BY ME! GOOD STUFF! JA NE!

Actually I agree, it does come off a lot better with Kenshin being the one who was sick. Also, your dialoge was great!

Heh, what can I say. Waffy, well written, and to the point. I got a little confused at one point, but it straightened out as I read more.

This was a pretty sweet fic (especially hear me squeak when I read the last sentence in your story). =)
Great job on your fiction! Keep it up!

That's very cute. It's a lot better than the horrid writing that plagues this site. May I make a couple of suggestions though? Please take no offense, for I come humbly only wanting to help.

1) When writing a paragraph, unless you're purposely attempting to write a paragraph with completely parallel structure, it is best to start each sentence with a different word. If it is necessary to start two sentences with the same word, try and make the sentences far apart from one other so the paragraph does not have a repetitive feel.

2) "A small walk won't hurt this one." -Try to keep your thoughts of the character all in one format so the reader doesn't become confused. Also, if you're going to express thoughts in the above format, addressing the thinker is necessary. It may seem obvious to you as to who is speaking, but the reader does not have teh same depth of a understanding of a piece as the writer.

However, all in all this is a good piece. As you stated, it was short, but it did not feel rushed, so the length was fine. The fluff factor scored an A+ on my grading system... Not that I have one XD.

If you have any questions or are interested in speaking you can email me at SuperSheba@ If you would like to communicate over an instant messanger program, email me to get the information, since I don't like broadcasting it all over the internet. Thank you for your time.

-Sheba