Pretty good, just make sure to keep the words suttle.

Awesome! Good work! :) I hope you continue and update soon! ;)

You're doing a very good job going far deeper into the world of Krystal and what secrets that Dinosaur Planet holds than as shown in the game. In addition, it's a detailed, interesting, and well written story to boot.

I'll continue to read this one as the chapters keep coming. Keep up the good work!

Hmm...not bad at all. Can't wait to see where this goes.

Excellent I am huge Starfox fan you are writing a good story. I look forward to the rest.

this is very good, unlike my story -_- and it sounds like it'll turn into something good too ^_^
and i'm sure it'll be a big hit too, ya