That was great! Poor Charlie, I love him so!

Fu-ck-ing hell. =| This is amazing. Definate faves. Just, ah, beautiful!

"Jack pretends he didn't see the way Charlie's eyes lit up at the attention. He doesn't want to embarrass him.

Jack feels like a bastard."

"How could he have let this go on for so long? he asks himself. What was he doing wrong -- so wrong that Charlie started feeling worthless?"

"Charlie plays a few chords aloud on his guitar, affection-starved but smiling."

The prose of this is absolutely gorgeous...love the present tense. 'affection-starved but smiling'. Just gorgeous! =| =| =|

Loved it.
Well written, and read smoothly.

*smiles* Damn straight.

That's cool! ^.^

aww that was really good.

Hey I liked your story, LOST is a great show. Let me know if you make more stories. This one actually had a visual

Great start. Can't wait for more.