...beautiful...
I love it. You have a perfect grasp of the escence of every character and you express their feelings and personalities wonderfully.
Thank you very much for the shout out...*huggles* Keep up the good work! ^_^

Wai!

You know this chapter is insanely fluffy, right? And I think you write as Zero extremely well (I noticed that with the Kizna and Zero chapter as well). Like, it’s almost mind-boggling how much these actions are so… ZERO XD

There were only two problems I could see: Erts blocking feelings and not putting quotation marks when they're talking telepathically. See, with the first problem, Erts has said that if someone touches him, he automatically feels their feelings and hears their thoughts, hence the reason he was very against touching people. His telepathy is not something that he can barricade; however,EI suppose it is possible for him to have learned this new skill during his time piloting.

And, as for the quotes... just because they're talking in through their connection doesn't mean you shouldn't use quotes :) It makes it easier to read because then you're not trying to figure out what is thought and what is dialogue. Some people like to use double parenthesis for telepathic talk, and that's generally fine too.

All in all, I think this was a good chapter. I’ll review the others when I don’t have a final in four hours that I need to start studying for.

I actually LIKE this fic, which is rare. I mean, it has to be the first fic I read in a while that is trying to follow the canon (though, if you suddenly decide to write a Zero/Hiead chapter or Hiead/Ikhny chapter... I'll have to maim you. Those aren't anywhere near canon), AND is well written. Brava!

The only weird thing I see is the comment about Leena never seeing Garu is casual clothes. Like, in the manga and the OVA, they do occasionally wear normal clothes, so it wouldn't be strange to her. I have some pictures of them in casual clothes I can show you, if you want. Just email me or something.

Anyway, keep up the good work. Writers like you make me think there is hope for the MK section yet.

Very nice...very nice indeed! Very incharacter...er...well...believable anyway. I bet Little Fire will just love you and this fic cuz it's so...logical...
^__^
I look forward to the next chapters... ;)