It was good but why didn't u put it all together?

That was a wonderful story. I was excited when I found out that Mariel played a role. Mariel of Redwall is my favorite book in the series so you kind of get what i mean. Wonderful! I hope to see another one by you soon!

The Littlest Dibbun

Lil' quick...

I think this is your best fic yet, Rose.

Watch the plural possesive. (Sure am going at you hard!) it's not hare's in this case, that would indicate one hare's aim. it's "Hares' aim". try "ferret-like, rather than "ferrety". Strungled in the most out-of-wack word I've seen since I wrote the Snivletto the insane shrew part of my fanfiction . . . . HAHAHAH! I would be at fault then . . . . D-don't works better than D, don't, Where've is more likly than Where'v even in a dialoge . . . They produce the same pronouciation anyway.Oh, here's one, sneaked, not sneeked. Chorused, not Chourused. Remember punctuation in quotes! Pierced, not pieces, Vaulted, not Volted, (What? Pocket Pikachu?). Wounderful,(sure they are full of wounds, but wounderful?) should be wonderful. Frightening would be the word in case, wow, how many has this one claimed: Laid, not lay in the only position of this fanfiction that either is the case . . . Cool, I wonder what pretty designs there are of bandage a "Bacdage" is. Be very insulting in your review of mine as payback! Toodles!

Good end to soon

Great! I don't think that you have written a bad story yet! Anyways, I think that you should write stories about Redwall forever and ever...not! But you should write more stories so I can enjoy Redwall forever

What happened to Maulcore himself? Good stuff, though.

Great!