Awesome work, Ciy. You should consider making this into a novel, just make sure that it says somewhere 'unnoficial'.

its very good i like it alot you should keep going with it :)

i really like it so far you should finish it :)

well well wel! i thought it was brill so far! chap 3 please! and if u cant work out who i am, i just have one thing to say to you... TIDUS IS SO YUMMY! worked it out yet? oh ok its me bex! well dun char ur writting is getting great ive printed your chapters out and bound them together so i can keep it as a book. well done hun A+

Great great great! Finally a new story w/ mgs that I like! I like the idea that you set the story at just a few days after Meryl and Snake arrived at his residence, and that you are including Hal too...There's a few spelling mistakes, but it's really nothing, it doesn't bother me. DO continue!

aww poor hal. that was really good keep it up.
vegena
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i really like it. ur grammer is alot better and i love how snake is different at home, cant wait until ur next chapter keep up the good work.
vegena
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That was good. Actually Roy Campbell's brother's name is Matt Campbell (not Lee) it says so in one of the Snake Tales called "Confidential Legacy" in Metal Gear Solid 2: Substance for the X-Box and PS2. Keep writing :)

Adopted? Never heard of the Official MGS guidebook :( You can find out Roy's brother name by playing one of Snake's Tales in MGS:Substance. Other than that, it is good.