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Pureevil230 2006-04-08 ch 3,	abuseaww brennan can't be dead that's so not fair. besides im sick of romeo and juliett the guy and girl need to be together in life not death. UPDATE SOON!
Graysen 2006-01-21 ch 3,	abuseinteresting plot. Can't wait to read what happens next.
brennan-freak 2005-10-04 ch 3,	abuseWOW, a really fantastic update! I love it! And hurray you updated, thank you, I am so happy, happy, happy! A very long chapter and it is so exciting to read, so interesting, it makes me so curious, what will happen next! Oh, poor Brennan, he must obey David and the blonde **, he is trapped inside his mind and body, must be really tormenting! (I love it! Ah, could you make him obey me too! Hahahahahah, would like that very much! Oh, what I could do with him, Hm! Day dreaming here! Ah, sorry! But it's so tempting!) Emma loves him, Emma loves him not! Oh, it's just like peeling of the flower petals! Of course she loves you, you big dopey, who could not love you! (I know I can, ah, do!) And here we go again, killing himself, or at least that's what you make us think, but we know better, don't we! Okay, killing himself to save Emma, the one he loves! Oh hell, you just have to love him! Our big softy, so cocky on the outside, though so gentle and sensitive on the inside! (Ah, sounds like a commercial for sweets, hihihihihi! That's my Bren, sweeter then the most delicious chocolate!) So, he will live, of course! You can't kill him in the beginning of the story, you need him, he has to save his love Emma and tell her that he loves her and they live happily ever after! (Okay, that's a bit overdone!) Back to the story, what does David want with Emma's ability and what ways does he have to make her obedient! He can't use Bren to blackmail her anymore, you know hurting him if she doesn't obey! Yeah, you are making me very curious! Maybe they will find out Bren is just faking and subdue him again with their drugs or they will torture Bren to make Emma use her abilities! (Would like that very much, evil grin!) But what ever it is, let us know soon, I need a new chapter, the suspense is killing me and my healt isn't so good lately you know, with all these exciting stories and no updates, I am deteriorating very fast, I think I am fading, my body is evaporating! I need to stuff it with a new chapter, it's my life force, so hurry and write a new chapter please! (Hahahahahahahahah, having much fun here, LOL!) PLEASE UPDATE SOON!
Mony19 2005-09-25 ch 3,	abuseGood Chapter I am glad Emma realzes she loves Brennan. I hope he isn't dead. Ud soon
DreamShadows 2005-08-19 ch 2,	abuseThis is really good, keep going with it, I want to see what happens next!! Why that no good double crossing, son of a-!
brennan-freak 2005-07-28 ch 2,	abuseHello, again a really good begin for a FANTASTIC story which the writer has abandoned! What is it with YOU WRITERS don't you care about your Reviewers? Aren't they important? I really like the beginning of your story and the fact that it is a Brennan-Emma story is great! (Don't see them much these days on fanfic!) Of course as a big Brennan Fan, I love the way you describe him, as a tough guy with a soft spot and so hurt that he is out of controle and runs, just like him!! And then he get's captured because he lets his feeling take over!! WONDERFULL!! And what will happen next? NO..NO, NO ANSWERS IN ONE AND A HALF YEAR! So now I am just sitting here and deciding, am I going to sob or getting really angry, well I think it's a bit of both! What must we Reviewers do to get you back to this story or any other story, preferable MUTANT X! I saw you didn't write anything after november 2004, what is wrong, don't you like writing anymore, have other interests or a writersblock? Well if that is true you should write that in your Personal profile, so Reviewers know why you don't update or can help with your writersblock! SORRY if I am a little blunt but I am on Fanfic for only one month now and have red a lot of stories who don't have an end, so I am getting a little irritated, and when I found your story which is coming out to be really FANTASTIC I just can't, No won't have it anymore!! SO FOR GODS SAKE (And mine especially!) UPDATE THIS FANTASTIC WONDERFULL PROMISING STORY! PLEASE..PLEASE..PLEASE..PLEASE..PLEASE..PLEASE..PLEASE!
Megara1 2004-11-16 ch 2,	abuseHi !! I totally agree with the sentence " Love makes fools of us,all " I know David was the bad boy, poor Brennan ! But we know Emma and the team will rescue him, of course ! More soon please !! Megara1
imjuzakyd 2004-11-16 ch 2,	abuseok, now that was weird... “Love makes fools of us all, my friend.
Tiantian Wang 2004-11-15 ch 2,	abuseGreat work, I love how u ended this chapter. Hope u update soon...
Reiver 2004-11-15 ch 1,	abuseThanks for the feedback guys! Susan - thanks for the pointers, I had never thought about your first point before really so that was handy. The second point I had said it was two weeks later but perhaps it wasn't clear enough, will have to check that! If you see anything else don't hesitate to mention it. It's the only way we get better!
deichtine 2004-11-14 ch 1,	abuseInteresting beginning. Can I offer a couple elements of constructive criticism? 1. In the first pgph you describe Shalimar as "sexy as ever". From whose vantage point is she considered sexy? Because at this point in the story, if there is any character viewpoint, it would be Emma's. This comment leads the reader to understand that Emma sees Shal as sexy, and I for one was confused, thinking that this was going to develop into an ES story. If there is to be no character vantage point, only narrator, then I would suggest not using the term sexy - in order for something to be sexy, there has to be a person appreciating that sexiness - even when you're alone, get dressed up and look in the mirror and think "Damn I'm sexy", it is you yourself who is appreciating the allure - not to say you're sexually attracted to yourself, only that you are acknowledging your own attractiveness to others. I know I'm not explaining this well, but let me try. If you want to emphasize that Shal is dressed to 'impress', give it a character vantage: you could make it Shal-focussed for the purpose of the sentence such as "she [Shal] was dressed in a svelte black dress, an outfit she knew would drive the men at the club wild." Or you can make it Emma-centric (my personal preference) and thereby build the onging Emma-based character vantage for the scene, something like "Emma looked up at her friend, noting the tight black top, the carefully subtle makeup that somehow both softened her eyes and emphasized their agressiveness. She was obviously on the prowl." 2. Brennan says that since Emma met David, she's been neglecting the team. That might be something he would say after a week or two, but not after only a day. It's way too early. It's not unrealistic for him to be jealous and protective, but I would suggest he would object in a different way. I'm not saying this to tear you down - these are minor points and I'm putting them down to help your writing because you and this story have real potential. Hope I was a help. Susan/Deichtine.
Tiantian Wang 2004-11-14 ch 1,	abuseThis is a great start for a B/E story, I hope you will update this story very soon.
imjuzakyd 2004-11-13 ch 1,	abusehey there! i see there's a new brennan/emma fic i have to keep posted for... nice! can't wait for the next chapter... smile, woki? =)
Megara1 2004-11-13 ch 1,	abuseHi ! I love all the Emma/Brennan stories, it's my favorit couple !! Your story is so good so far !! More soon please Megara1

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