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| MikaelaCheryl 2005-01-07 ch 2,  | abuseLol, nice ending of chapter 2. Will there be more or not? |
| AirForceInTraining 2005-01-04 ch 2, | abuseI like the fic. Definitely liked the idea and how you wrote it. Good work. |
| irismoon 2004-12-18 ch 2, | abuseHi, You have the beginnings of an okay story here but there are some issues. 1. Don't put the story in bold face font, it realy takes away. 2. It's raped not rapped 3. You really need to describe stuff, all you have is dialogue and that doesn't make for a compelling story. Plus the leaps you are making between plot points and the akward P.O.V are very distracting. Hope this helps, Iris |
| Nerwen Aldarion 2004-11-15 ch 1, | abuseOH I LOVE THIS I HAVE ALWAYS THOUGHT SOMETHING LIKE THAT HAPPENED TO SARA UPDATE SOON! |
| Sponge Hearts 2004-11-14 ch 1, | abusei like your idea on the matter of why sara is the way she is. this is great and i hope you post more soon. Becca |
| Smirk1410 2004-11-13 ch 1, | abuseI'm sorry..but the leaps you take in this story are just too big for my taste. POV is strange...using the full name Sara Sidle doesn't feel right. Error: he rapped her...he raped her. I don't know if you want to publish my review, it doesn't matter if you won't, I just wanted you to know my opinion. Keep up the work. I'm trying too. |