Reviews for The Black Angel

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Shubaltz Crazist 2008-08-14 ch 7,	abuseYo, you know that, I remember when you very first began this story...and whoa! 4 yrs? Hell yeah from the red neck girls like me. I'm actually Australian Jillaroo...hehe. This fic brings back so many memories...it is now officially cherished. ^_^ I first read this in year seven and now i'm in year 11!! Whoohoo! Can't wait to read more! Hell Yeah! SC
ShadowRebirth37 2008-08-13 ch 7,	abuseHey... this fic is pretty cool!! I like it! Hehe. I read this fic a long long time ago, but sadly I forgot to leave a review. I'm sorry. But now I have an account to leave a proper review. Lol. This story is very neat, and I like it. Reminds me of something, but I just can't put my finger on it... lol. Btw, if you ever get some time, could you possibly R & R a few of my fics? I have a bunch about Raven, but some have Major Schubaltz in them, like "To Save a Raven" and "Broken" and a few others. Lol. ;) Anyway, I like this fic!! The descriptions and writing style is very good, and I love it!! I hope you update soon!! XD ~Ibeyla ^^
come back running xx 2008-06-24 ch 6,	abuseI read this story a really long time ago, and I thought it was really good, and I still do think that! good job, and good luck with your next chapter! Also, I am currently writing a (Zoids chaotic century) romance fanfiction called "the wish." if you can I was wondering if you can r&r. Thankyou. Again, wonderful chapter, and I'm really happy you decided to continue writing for this story. I am also a big fan of karl. --Lexii
Psyco Anime Luver 2008-06-24 ch 6, anon.	abuseMe likes it.
Shubaltz Crazist 2008-06-13 ch 5,	abuseWow, wow and wow, I read this story over two yrs ago! and you are updating again! quadripple wow! ^_^ SC
CrazyIrishBitch23 2008-06-11 ch 5,	abuseGreat story! I hope you update soon! ^_^ Peace, CrazyIrishBitch23
American Senpai 2008-06-09 ch 4,	abuseI really enjoy this story. Granted things did go by kind of fast. Ignore the ** who flamed you I enjoy OC fics just as much as I do canon and it only matters how you write the story. I personally think you're pulling it off. There's is alot that's being left out though so it's a little confusing. Much love, American Sempia
Psyco Anime Luver 2007-06-04 ch 4,	abuseThis is a really good story so far. Keep it up.
Rain Grey Wolf 2007-05-28 ch 4, anon.	abuseStill as good as ever. I hope you update more often now. Good work.
Razzle Dazzle Chick 2007-03-04 ch 1,	abuseI like this chapter !
white lioness0429 2006-08-19 ch 1,	abuseNice story oh and about the organoid - not sure if you know but a Zoids game was released some time ago with the main character having a leopard organoid called Pulse so it goes to show that they don't always have to be based off dragons/dinosaurs.
rach 2006-02-01 ch 9, anon.	abuseaarrgghh! Cliffie please finnish it was just getting jucy!
Squared Spoon 2006-01-03 ch 10,	abuseWow. This. fic. is. so. bad. If I were to count the number of n00b sins committed in this fic, I would die before my IQ hit zero. First off, WAY too many OC characters. Let me guess, they're all based on your friends and family, or maybe you don't have those either. Maybe you invented them to compensate for your lack of real friends. All of the OC characters make the fic VERY confusing. I'm really not surprised that some of your other reviewers thought the same thing. I really don't know what the hell is going on. To make things worse, you add the official characters to the already chaotic plotline. Do tell, how do you decide who speaks next? By drawing names out of a hat? Ugh, the dialogue is so generic and OOC. It really doesn't matter who says what, does it? Also, the official characters take a backseat to all of your originals. This isn't a ZOIDS fic; it's YOUR STORY with Zoids characters. Before you write a fic, I highly suggest you analyze the characters more deeply. ALL of your characters are one dimensional and single-traited (with the exception of Alex, who is actually a manifestation of you). Scratch that, ALMOST all your characters are single-traited; Karl is worst off. It seems that his sole purpose in this fic is to look pretty and fawn over you-oops, I mean, Alex. He acts SO OOC, which leads me to wonder whether you've actually SEEN Zoids. And PLEASE LEARN HOW TO SPELL. I think in one chapter the mother calls one of her children "sweaty". How endearing. I wish my mother called me body waste secreted by the skin, too. Darn, those lucky Claws kids. Oh yes, and DESSERT Panthers? This may have been a typo, BUT THAT'S WHY WE PROOF READ. Do you know how embarassing it is to make a spelling error that completely changes the meaning of the term? Utterly, my dear, it is utterly embarassing. I'm craving some cake. Maybe the Dessert Panthers can help. And that silly, irrelevant story about your friend and duct tape? We don't care. We really don't. Don't put author's notes in the middle of the fic. It interrupts what little flow there already was. Oh, and you spelled duct tape wrong. I thought somebody who was writing a story on duct tape would have known that. You should seriously consider revising your fic. Seriously. For serious. Really.
Rain Grey Wolf 2006-01-02 ch 10,	abuseShWeEt! I loved it. So I can't wait for O'Connell to propose. Hope to read more soon.
KairiXCataclysm 2005-12-29 ch 10,	abuseAww the last sentence was cute ^__^ can't wait for your next update, keep up the great work!

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