 Tabby Cats 2005-01-06 . chapter 3This is a very interesting and well-written story - I'm glad I saw it! Rowena is an engaging child, and while clearly precocious, is written very nicely as a young, eight year old girl. I'm also curious about these two boys...I imagine she bumped into Salazar (if the boy was also one of the four, and not just a normal young wizarding boy), but would that mean that Arlice is training Godric already?
I hope you don't think me incredibly stupid, but what is a gunna? Is it like a blouse or an apron, or something else entirely?
The only other thing I noticed was that in the first chapter, you used 'exhale', when I think you meant 'exile'. One or two other times, your sentence structure confused me on the first read, but made sense the second time through. I really do like your style of writing, however - it's a very enjoyable read, and certainly has me wondering what's coming next!
Please update soon! |
 McGonagall's Cat 2005-01-06 . chapter 3This is OUTSTANDING!
I read the first three chapters and am sad there isn't much, much more already written! PLEASE write more soon.
I'm loving the bits and bobs of history and such you are weaving into this (though occasionally there were places that seemed a tad anachronisitic/modern).
More please, very soon! Thank you. |