It's really nice,
I like it a lot!
so I'm begging u to continue,
don't give up this fic...
I'll be looking forward to you next chapter ^^
good luck with your writing~

pleas eupdate!!

Great story! Can't wait to read more! Update soon^^!

Mm...This is entertain, isn't it? I do wish it had been continued. It's quite amusing to think of Kurapika socking Leorio for feeling him up or something, thinking he was a girl...heh heh heh...

I'm interested and would love to see more. (But looking at the date of the fic, I guess you might have given it up. That would be a pity.)

Interesting... I really like your writing style and you've kept the characters remarkably true to their personalities in the manga... Although the fact that Killua's parents are lawyers seems a bit out there... I would have thought they would be more mafia-type or something. XD Either way, nice job!!

I'll be checking back a lot to see when you update, okay? So please, update soon!

-- MI

This is really good! There aren't many HXH fics out there, let alone well-written ones, but this is great! The chars are all done very nicely, and the part about Illumi as a hairdresser was funny. ^^ Update soon, kudasai!

Hello, it's Skylark again. Thanks for taking the trouble of sending me an email. I'll do my best to keep up with Hatsu. Alright, I'm reiviewing as I read. Forgive any insantities you might encounter - I have finals looming soon.

Things in subways? I guess they're called the Underground... I'm not sure.

Ah... length of chapters... Forgive me if it annoyed you, but I guess it's a preference of mine, since I tend to read fast and the sight of a tbc popping out almost immediately is somewhat irking. But as I said, what matters more is content. If you're comfortable with short chapters, then write them by all means, rather than long ones of poor quality.

"...igniting a spark that would start a fire that could never be extinguished." The two that's made the expression a bit clumsy, I think. Maybe this way: "...igniting a spark that would start an inextinguishable fire."

Nice descriptions of the house, the beach and the city. Rumours about Illumi... is Hisoka coming in this? Don't answer if you don't want; I'm definitely going to see for myself.

Sorry for the rushed review, but I have to go. Nice cliffhanger, by the way. It's Illumi, isn't it?

Good work... awaiting more.

Free Skylark.

I was looking forward to this story when you mentioned in an interest in pursuing the idea. There were many things I liked about the first chapter, yet I have some points I'd like to point out.

The first line of the first/second? paragraph of the chapter seems a little awkward. Starting off by stating that it wasn't "an altogether unpleasant room" sort of throws the reader off, because there wasn't anything that suggested it was any of the sort in the first place. If you cut that part, and started off with "it would make legions of boys..." I don't think it would lessen its impact anymore than with the first part in.

"He changed from his ‘lazy’ clothes to his ‘going-outdoors-skateboarding’ clothes."
Being a little more specific about what kinds of clothes these are would make this sentence more meaningful. Perhaps you rely on the reader to fill in what kinds of clothes Killua is wearing based on his character from canon HxH 'verse, but then it makes it anyone's guess.

The rest is just small things, like how you don't really need "marigold-yellow" to describe Killua's mum's dress, "marigold" by itself is fine, since marigold is a yellow flower (marigold-yellow is kind of like saying "rose-red"). I think the Zaoldyeck mum's screaming in italics would work better if the italics were more sparingly used. The first sentence is fine, but by the second, it loses its impact in its repitition.

Overall, I thought your characterization of Killua and his parents were on target, Killua was appropiately bratty in that mocking way of his, and the Zaoldyeck folks were portrayed as well as they were in the manga. I wished that this chapter was a little longer, as it doesn't get to the point the summary had promised us, but it's better that it was short and well-done rather than long and full of mistakes. Keep up your good work, I happily await the next chapter.

So far it's good. But it's hard to tell since the story hasn't really started jet.

Okay, I'm not an expert with hxh either, so I may not be entirely correct. Well, the idea of the story was relatively new to me, and I would like to read more. Your style is kinda slow, but I have no personal objections to that, since I prefer slow plots myself. The way you decribe Killua's room was well done; the only comment is about the typo of "closthes" on line four in the first paragraph.

As for characters, I suppose you didn't go OOC, concerning Silva and his cool control, Killua's rather disinterested attitude, and our dear Zaoldyeck banshee.

All in all, I liked it. Waiting to read more. Thanks for sharing this.

Free Skylark.

PS: Would all chapters be this short? 0.0 I'm rather into long installments... Doesn't matter, as long as there's quality, perhaps...