you, are one of the most awesome people I have met in my life! Marry my plushie! joke. But the awesome person part is true

This is an interesting story line. It reminds me of the books I used to read. It's really good so far, just a few typos. Other than that, it's interesting and original.

I just wanted to know if it would be okay if I did a stroy on two mythics including a mermaid and an angel. If not then just say.

Wow. I'm very impressed.

Wow. I've lately taken to reading lots of fics and yours is by far my favourite one ever. And that's saying quite a bit since I'm usually an extremely picky person when it comes to my reading. Of course there were flaws, there always are. Some strange sentence structure here, the odd typo there. But in whole it was really good. I know you can't tell but I just paused for about ten minutes or so trying to think of a critique to add and unfortunately failed. Now I'm going to go and read both the sequels to this and possibly be up all night (again).
Buh bye

Hey! That's weird! On FictionPress I was planning to do something about 13 too!

BTW, what is Raphael's Mythic form?

--TOF--

NO! NO!

Why?! Why?! SOB SOB...

No way! Definitely not boring! Seriously, I think you should get this thing published...

oh i'm gonna kill u 4 that ending, r they in ur sequal?? they'd beter be, ps like ur emali 2 weird person, did they realy call u a second hitler?!

ARRGH! will i evr get the chance 2 fin zis stry! its v gud but i have so little time now! Will fin it but barly have time 2 my my own stry, not that any1s perticularly interested but what da hell. its v gud.

This story is amazing. I loved it.

Dance is truly a torturous activity! That's why I really hate it when basketball players or football players are all like 'Ooh, pretty ballerinas! How pathetic!" Hey! Dance takes balance, grace, strength, and a whole heap of other things that I don't have (I take a ballet class once a week, and do decently, but I'm really struggling compared to the other girls who have all been there since, like, birth.) the casting of the ballet was...was...*cracks up laughing*. Oh, that was good...and a little suspicious. I wonder if Miss Elizabeth has any idea of what she's done. And Medusa's defensives streak is becoming endearing. Not to mention easy to relate to, I know I've had days where I'm close to that attitude. Awesome-possum!

Hello! It's-a me! Marionette! (Sorry, I could NOT resist that one. Also sorry it took so long to get back to reading this. School and theatre are murderous beasts that eat up your freetime just when you think you have time to sit down and type. Which is why my fanfiction progress continues to be slow. But I AM working.) I continue to adore your style and flair, of course. What I really loved about this chapter was Minotaur's (David's) And Siren's (Raven's) perfect harmony, despite differences (in shape, size, powers, personality, and just about everything else) they have. Really shows what people can do when they work together. I mean, the whole system that they had worked out...twas awesome. And some Siren vs. Medusa hatred! The whole conversation between the three, with Minotaur/David as the peacemaker (I thought he'd be the one causing the problems) was awesome. One more thing to love about this: the difficulties they each faced with their powers. Mice-eating hair, awkward feet, don't-know--my-own-strength...really brings home the fact that powers aren't all glamour and goods. I read onward!

i feel like deja vu cuz i think the same cap. is twice 14&15
shouldn't this be under GreekMyth. even so i luv the story and can't wait to finish

Dude, I don't really get your calculations here:
"It was two weeks since they had last seen Raphael. Fourteen days since they had single-handedly destroyed his reign. One hundred and sixty four minutes since they had almost lost their second form."
The "one hundred and sixty four minutes" part. I mean, in two weeks, there are twenty thousand one hundred sixty minutes, right? 'Cause, sixty minutes in an hour, twenty-four hours in a day, multiplied by fourteen days and why the hell am I typing all of these numbers out in words? What a waste of time, 'cause, when typing, I employ the hunt-and-peck method...you know. But, I digress. Back to business...no, I'm done. Nevermind.
Okay, about the actual story now. I liked it. It might be just me, but I think it would have been more believable if one of the characters had an annoying (younger?) sibling. Well, believable if one was to ignore the story being centered around mythical people/creature/things. It just seems that everyone I know has a sibling. Infact, off the top of my head, I can't think of anyone I know who doesn't have a sibling.
So, overall, I liked the story quite a bit. Favorite character's David. He's just so nice and wholesome. Which is kind of ironic to me since I've never really met a "good" David. And my grandfather doesn't count 'cause I don't remember him. Anyhow, yea...all of the Davids I've met have been mean or "bad". But, your David, yea...nice guy. I like 'im! Oh, but Medusa's power=way cool! I mean, I like the color green, and I like snakes, and rocks are pretty. But, you know, not all rocks, obviously...
Okay, I'm going to stop typing now because I'm thinking a lot faster than I can type. This happens often when I speak as well. I start thinking what I'm going to say and my mouth moves and sound comes out but it's kind of hard to understand what I say 'cause my words get jumbled together and put backwards occasionally and I think it's kind of like dyslexia of the mouth and word diarreah(sp?) put together.
Uh, huh. So. Really done now. Okay, bye.