oh my gosh! your stories are so great you HAVE to make more how hard can it be i mean violet is the coolest! But do make more you must your a great writter!

Hey, I know you haven't updated for a while, but I really enjoyed your story so far. So if you could maybe finish this, that would be great. Meanwhile, I'll put it on my favorite stories list. I especially liked the part where Vi told Sarah off. ; )

What could go wrong? Let me guess - just about everything? Great story, love how you hop inside Violet's head so well. The thoughts and coments could genuinely be hers, it's that good. Keep it up!

Nice story! I can't really think of anything that stuck out like a sore thumb for me to give constructive criticism on, so be proud! I loved how you did Sarah, mainly because of the way she reacted to Vi. And of course the name Wonderbra Woman is pure hilarity. If there's one thing that made your writing style exceptional, though, I think it would be all the italicized thoughts that Violet has; it just adds a whole new level to the story, and a lot of it is quite witty, to boot. ;) Oh, and personally I think it would be quite funny if you put Kari somewhere in the story, assuming that you carry it on longer than just this first date. Just a suggestion from my humble self, though.

Me liking, just you need to add a few flashbacks to when Vi was a teenage goth ice queen person, cause that's when Vi was my fav charactor. See you next chapter.

W00t! I am *way* enjoying this story! Great job! Lots of forethought and depth, and you've done a wonderful job extrapolating the characters. Keep it up!

Delightful! Your writing style is almost as engaging as it is witty. I had quite a bit of fun reading this - something I've missed from ff.n stories recently.

H-h-h-hilarious! ROFLs, LMAOs, and LOLs to ya! Update Please!

Wow, great story! Update soon please!

Really enjoying the story so far, esp. Violet's manipulation of Sarah. Nothing like using the system to one's advantage.

Two small criticisms: Tony seems just a *little* too collected while talking to Violet-it's only been two days since he tripped over his own tongue trying to ask her out; similarly, though I don't doubt her experiences with Syndrome and the Underminer have given her a recent self-confidence boost, Violet strikes me a little too self-assured, both with Tony and Sarah.

Also, and this is being *really* nitpicky, 'The Incredibles' is set around the early 1960's-note the WWII-era "Doing Our Part!" poster in Bob's office and the very distinctive architecture/home design of the Parr's house. Bob's father may very well have been a *Great* War veteran, but Bob himself was an adult and practicing superhero during the Second World War. (This also means Helen wouldn't have or be expected to have a "personal cell phone"-ubiquitous communication is very much a late-90's/early-00's concept.)

Those are minor complaints, though: your characterizations are very good (especially, oh, Bob's conversation with Violet-lovely insight), and your prose is among the best I've seen among Incredibles fanfic. I'd love to see this story continue-and conclude.

Your writing just sucked me in. Can't glimpse any plot yet though, so get some in. Keep going!

Good Work...nice storyline so far..lookin forward to more stories

"Still, she reasoned, nothing was going to arise that she couldn’t handle, right? After all, she was a super hero. What could go wrong?"

Oh, how little Violet knows... I especially liked how she got Sarah to leave, go Violet! Great chapter, can't wait to see what else you have up your sleeve.

This is very good! I really liked the way you have the characters portrayed and how you managed to capture the way their personalities are! Well done. The end of the 4th chapter has a good cliffhanger. Leaves you waiting for, and expcecting, more.

Keep up the good work! I look forward to reading more!

*Zorin aka Jaime*

K9 and General Pard: 0o0...GO VI!

Leutenunt General Souveirg: Ah man! I was hopin' for a Catfight.