cool story

cool

Interesting story, up to the next one.

This is pretty good overall, yet so so far their impact on the wizarding world has been minimal. Of course this story does stand out in that the backstory to the changes is well developed which is rarer than you might think. I think what Harry potter fan fiction most needs is stories that do not involve Voldemort. Let him already be defeated, or just make it a universe where he was killed at Harry's birth. I also recommend completed avoiding canon, as even variations get too predictable. Still, this story all in all a good read. I think the only obvious points I saw was for Trevor not to know Harry was using magic was hard to believe, and I also don't remember Blaise wanting to at least try to learn wandless magic.

cool story

getting exciting!

Oh, ouch. That had got to hurt. The poor guy...

i'm not quite sure i want to know where the game idea came from, but i'm sure glad it was born. absolutely hilarious. i actually fell off m chair reading this story...multiple times...

Hmm. I like the Mafia idea. It's something I never would have connected to Harry. I like how the story only follows the books to the barest minimum, including no trio. Good to see authors branching off.

Aww! Mafia Xmas is cute :D i want to play Mousetrap Clue Army! that would rock!

Was his first child a son or a daughter. What was there name. How old were thay when they died. Is Harry jealous of them.

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Hi. I'm reviewing partly because I didn't want to just favorite and run; but also because I really liked this chapter. The Mouse Trap-Clue-army men game would have been the hardest I've laughed at something online in a while, if the other people in the room weren't sleeping. Oh well, I was having a bit of a fit mentally, anyway. I think the is one of the best mafia!Harry stories that I have read. Ick, I'm going to go all serious here, but thank you for posting the story, sharing your talent, etc., etc. I wish you good writing, a helpful muse, and that there will always be a marshmellow for your cocoa.

Great story. Can't wait to read the sequel.

Awsome story.