Good work :) You wrote Mirage well, her thoughts sounded perfect.

I luv Mirage! This story is really well done! (sigh) I wish there were more fics about her! :(

Man! You are good!

This was BRILLIANT. I am currently in awe. I have rarely read such an inspiring fic. This is what writing is ABOUT! Wohoo! I am adding this to my favorites right now!

Oh, very, very nice...

That is a powerful scene in the movie, and that look that she gives Buddy...that pained, betrayed, speechless look of disbelief...killer.

You did the whole section justice with this story. I loved the way it played out...I'm not sure if you put the dialogue through exactly as it was in the movie, but it's close enough. Other than that, the rest is great. I liked her little chat with the soldier.

You do a good job with getting into people's heads, a very good job.

And you know, if it's not too much, I'd like to request something-I've given this one a shot myself, but it's not really working. I know you have a lot of projects, but...I was wondering if you could get into Azula's head during the final battle of season two. Besides the fact that she's evil, she's almost heroic in that fight. Especially with that final moment...she was probably panicking there, she had one shot to save the Fire Nation, she's the only one who knows about the eclipse...

If you don't have time, I'll give it another shot or two, but I'm not completely satisfied with how it's going.

Unless it would be easier for you to be my editor for the story? Would that work?

Back to your story, I'm impressed again. I've been questioning Mirage's character at times...you put it down pretty well. Finding a way to excuse her for leading a bunch of Supers to their deaths is not really an easy task...and the whole thing with her filling out the "terminated" category for the family was striking.

Nice work again.

That was great! Is it finished?

Very good story. I kinda figured that was why she decided to help the Incredibles

Please keep writing.

Nice work!Very well written and realistic. I enjoyed it!

I beat you there on seeing the Incredibles! I saw it 4 times. Once in the theatres and 3 times at home on 3 different DVD players.*nods like that actually meant something important*

Anywayz yes I am here to review once again a nice and long review. Well as long the others were I mean. I only wish that this one-shot wasn't over. I feel like that scene could have gone into a deeper situation. Could you maybe write an expanded version of what happened. More romance I mean. Like more interaction between Syndrome and Mirage maybe.

I just felt like the movie went over their relationship a little too fast. It was like they fought and Mirage left and that was it. I liked the way you extended the details about how he kissed her thoguh that was cute. . I'm telling all my friends bout yur awasome writing!

See Ya!

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Hi! I really loved the movie also, but I'm here to talk about the story...I loved it! The detail was great and you somehow answered the unanswered questions you know, like the end part about the knowing about the kids and stuff. I can tell by your penname that you like the Teen Titans, I so do too! -bre

i love, love, love this story. mirage was an awesome charecter and i wanted more of her, and you've written this incredibly well.

This fanfic was really enjoyable to read. (You're right; Mirage truely is under apprieciated by Pixar and Disney... She didn't even get an action figure!) As far as my critique goes, The beginning was border-lining fanfic fluff ("You are weak" was too repetative), but you made up for it with the developement of Mirage's character and exploring deeper into her relationships. I really, really enjoyed reading this. :)

Incredible! Simply incredible. No flaws I could spot at all.

Very good one shot. Liked everything.. HM, would you ever consider writing a longer story that involved everybody?

I like it girlie! I finally saw the movie myself, and it was awesome! Anyway, very nice putting that scene into words, it was great work!