   Ganheim 2007-12-01 . chapter 1but to lean over me in such a manner… when did he get so tall?
[This entire story is a comedic masterpiece, but lines like this are highlights to be remembered for ages. Simple, a vague start to pages of laughter.]
“Are you sure this one was the only one they had, Miroku?”
[I am confused. Miroku? In the modern world? I’ve theorized that the Well can take any humans (Souta’s the only one beside Kagome to try, and he more climbed down and cried), but…what? An alternate universe, perhaps?]
Dokkasou
[Punctuation: missing a closing period. I also want to say that although I normally don’t approve of Japanese, I’m usually open to allowing attacks (for example, the “Backlash Wave” was introduced in the English translation as Bakuryuuha). However, this was so “BOOM” here it is and there it goes – and I forgot the name of Sesshoumaru’s attack and had to look it up – that I was confused. Still, the brevity of it does work well for the comedy, and Inuyasha’s exclamation clearly indicates that Sesshoumaru attacked.]
“He’s a Persian.”
[If you’re going to make a snooty Sesshoumaru any cat, _this_ was most definitely the right subspecies.]
Spinning around, he roared his battle cry at his brother… only his ‘battle cry’ came out as more of a ‘mew.’
[I’m already turning blue from laughing, and then this comes along.]
Oh, you’re a feisty boy!” Damn you, woman!
[This reminded me of a DeviantArt piece “Sesshoumaru is…”, with one frame dealing with the strange idea somebody thought of that Kagome could ‘sit’ Sesshoumaru.
“Sit, boy!”
“Play dead, girl.”
“Oh, Inuyasha, he’s so cute!”
Touch me and die.
[In some stories, I see highlights like this and state “Points: +1”, but that doesn’t quite seem to be enough here.]
The ‘meal’ she proposed for him to eat looked like the inside of a dead ogre, chopped and warmed over.
[The description made me think of descriptions of Akane’s cooking – probably because the last couple fanfics I’ve read are Ranma ½.]
The fact that he did not want, in fact would rather die than ingest that slop, was of no consequence. It was his and no one, man, demon, or otherwise was going to take possession of it without his consent.
[So true to Sesshoumaru’s character. And in perfect line with innumerable cats that I’ve seen and had to care for.]
“He’s all white and fuzzy, so… maybe Fluffy.”
[And a chorus of sneezing occurs throughout Japan.]
he could at least not do anything she said.
[Again so true to Sesshoumaru and cats in general.]
If possible Buyo laughed harder.
[The structure seems to imply a comma after ‘possible’, I think.]
Thank the gods! You, priest, will return this Sesshoumaru to his true state and I shall spare your life when I smite all those responsible for this humiliation.
[Points: +1]
This Sesshoumaru has changed his mind. You will die first.
[Points: +1]
You will pay dearly for using me in your mating display, little brother. And don’t call me Fuzzums.
[Points: +1]
With a final hiss and flick of his tail, he stormed out.
[This made me think of a specific scene in “Dogs and Cats”.]
If his enemies could see him now, they would probably allow him to suffer as he was for their own amusement rather than kill him. Frankly, he would rather die.
[Points: +2]
Woman, I would sooner turn over all my lands and power to my worthless brother and make a living licking the jelly from between Naraku’s toes then share a bed with you.
“Mew.”
[Points: +1]
He could not remember a time he had slept so deeply.
[This may have been a plot device, but I wanted to point out that actually dogs sleep much more deeply than cats: that’s why they drop off so quickly and are ready to get up and go so quickly. Cats, remaining in a shallower, more alert sleep, spend much more of their day resting.]
I have read many stories, and humour is one of my favoured genres, but I knew before I got halfway that this story had earned a place in my favourites. The quality and relentless humour places it up as high as “Open Mouth, Insert Foot”, my longtime top favourite. I cannot praise this story enough, I found only a missing period, but the story itself is virtually perfect.
God bless and happy writing,
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