Whew! I’m finally up to speed on the story.

Having Shinji see visions after touching a crack in the wall was cool. And I really like the interaction between Rei and Shinji.

Keep the chapters coming my friend.

Dale (AKA 94saturn)

I think this is a great chapter but I need to research the other anime series to understand what’s going on. So before I continue I need to Google Halbane. And I’m struggling to figure out where Hikari fits in. She is an NGE character but seems to be established in this story. I’ll keep reading and figure it out. That’s one of the problems with a crossover if a person is only familial with one series they have trouble understanding the story. That’s why I tend to stick to one or the other.

Dale (AKA 94saturn)

great fic. hoping for more soon.

You captured Rakka's voice well in the first part.

Sintendo pointed this out, there is glitch in the 1st & 3rd person perspectives. After the diary bit, you switch to "she" and then switch back to "I" for a sentence.

hm...
It seems more like a diary, anyway its nice

wow just wow

Great update, I look forward to the next.

hey, this is a cool story! too bad it is set after Reki's departure because Reki is my favourite character! o well, keep up the good work!

LUV it! update soon! and don't you just love Evangalion? It is soo cool that you put them in! I cannot wait for the ending.

Okay, time for Skepticism ^_^:

-First of all, nice touch, adding Eva characters to the story, I am intrigued to find out how they will meld with the storyline.

-I will send you an E-mail with the rest of my notes. I am sure that I shouldn't put any spoilers in a review.

Focus on more details though. It may turn out to be a fine story.

-Tashikawa

Let me see:

"Haibane" is spelled as such...not with the "i".

That's the only real error I can point out in the story thus far. The idea for twin Haibanes is not original, but I like its presentation to the reader.

So far, good work.

Interisting take on a sequel, though I did get a little confused in the middle, where the story changes perspective from Rakka to a narrator.

Nice work. I'm looking forward to reading more.

Well other than a quickie fix (it's spelled Haibane [no second i]), so far so good. I'll enjoy seeing your take on just where the twins are from and where they're going. The wings idea almost sounds like CLAMP's 'X' stories. Keep it up! ;-)

Welcome to the new Haibane Renmei forum here on FFN!

Ye old founder A-N

If you need me, I can pre-read your chapters. ^_^
Anyway, your story interests me! I'd love to see what happens next!