digitalwitch18 2007-06-26 . chapter 11Wow interesting! I really hope that you get a chance to come back and finish this story someday! It is really good! |
Syl 2006-08-17 . chapter 3 This story is really rife with typos. You seem to believe that periods have no place in dialogue (they do), and don't seem to proofread thoroughly. Case in point, this sentence.
“What are squawking about?” Spike snapped, her words confusing and making him sick. “I know you’re out of your gourd Dru, but now your just plan batty”
You're missing a "you" in that first line, for starters. Also, "her words confusing and making him sick." is awkward. "her words confusing and sickening him." might be better. "but now your just plan batty" is a bit of a trifecta. It should be you're, plain, and batty should have a period after it. It's also kind of odd to use present tense for both the gourd line and batty. Fixing that would lead to...
"What are you squawking about?" Spike snapped, her words confusing and sickening him. "I know you've always been out of your gourd Dru, but now you're just plain batty."
I realize this is an early chapter of an older story, and perhaps these mistakes die down in later chapters and works. If they do not, though, I really recommend you get some quality betas. |
Raksha Cain 2006-03-13 . chapter 11wow...i love this story, i have never seen this take on spikes death before. will there be updates soon? Atleast 5 cookies on the 5 cookie scale. |
Tara Summers 2006-01-26 . chapter 11Awesome job, as always. Sad to see it ending, but all good things must come to an end. |
silver midnight 2006-01-23 . chapter 11 liked this chappie. plz update soon, i really want to know what happens. you can't end it in one or two chapters, that's not enough. |
Red 2006-01-23 . chapter 11 This story is good, I can't wait to see what happens next |
SapphireAngL 2006-01-08 . chapter 10So not a bad story i really like it...But i think in a way u are rushing things all i think is you should slow down a bit..But thats just my opionon anyways i really love ur story so far its really good...update soon... |
meirta 2006-01-07 . chapter 10 thank you thank you thank you. I always keep in eye on this fanfic because I enjoy it so much. I enjoyed this chapter, of course I have enjoyed all the chapters so far, all I could ask is that you don't leave us faithful readers hanging so long. |
babyblue6666 2006-01-06 . chapter 10I love your story and this chapter…will be waiting for another update!... keep up the great work! Can’t wait! |
Sandy 2006-01-04 . chapter 10 Oh no you don't! You get right back here and finish this story! I am really enjoying it and I want more NOW, now, now, now, now, now. Please. |
briedee 2006-01-04 . chapter 10overly happy to see you still mostly alive and writing. keep it up! |
AngelFeet 2006-01-04 . chapter 10 Another one i can i add to my wicked section in my head...I love this story and am so glade it was update! way to go..cant wait for more good luck! |
Kiljoy 2005-12-16 . chapter 9 Do you think you could give us a new chapter for christmas. |
romanticbabysky 2005-10-21 . chapter 9I have to know what happens. Please update soon. |
Polaris 2005-10-17 . chapter 9 Please write more soon. |