I apologise in advance if this seems insulting, but this chapter's transformation was even more cloudy than the last. Recoomendation: stop SAYING its like this or that and start PROVING it through accurate description. other than that i don't have too many issues with it, and none of them are very important compared to dragoon transformations. heres a hint: go play the game again, and memorize the 'long' transformation for the character that you're writing the spirit of. ie rose - dark sphere, dart - lit on fire, haschel - i forget (think he was struck by lightning) meru - covered in ice blah blah blah.

poof, im gone.

This might be horribly rude, but I found your take on the w/s transformation to be bloody hillarious. although i really think it hurt the sequence badly that you kept saying this was "like in sailor moon" or that was "in a sailor moon manner". It would probobly be better if instead of sending readers to another resource to understand the mental image, you just described it FULLY and ACCURATELY. "Did a pose" is just an outright no-no. general rule: even if you aim something at a group that HAS knowledge of a particular subject, write it like youre introducing it to people who DON'T. otherwise you'll just get "uh...wtf? sketchy..." left and right. Im not trying to flame here, just being constructive - like i would want anyone else to be for MY upcoming fic (in which i'm almost positive im going to fade into doing what i just said was bad :X ) will continue reading in the hopes of finding the Gold Dragoon (poor kongol never found his Spirit in my game, and i was sad)

In the terms of writing quality, very childish. Good plot. However edit more and don't use cliche lines and overused figh scenes.

Very good! I liked this much better than your other one. Though you seem to like turning my favorite characters evil and warping some of the facts, your storys are quite good, and I cannot wait to read the sequal. And just for the fun of it, I'm guessing it's LLoyd again (though I'm hoping it'll be Melbu or Lenus)

Oh, I LIKE! I LIKE! I LIKE!

I just beat the game to!

So far it's good! I'll look into it some more soon!

Oh My god That was good

Des

Des_wind @hotmail.com

if ya ever want to talk about the game theres my email address

waiiiiiiiiii

great fic! _

but u made rose a bad person,

i like rose... other than that its a good fic

Wow. That was quite epic, derserving of being called a series. Hmm. I did detect a great bit of influence from other Animes, most notably Card Captor Sakura, with maybe a little Digimon Adventures? Maybe I'm just reading into symbolism too much. It was an enjoyable read, but I can never cease to stress the importance of paragraphs.

WHOOOOOOOO HOOOOOOOOOO! *claps wildly* HEYYYYY! kick ass man! I loved it- and i am SO DAMNED HAPPY THAT YOUR DOING A SEQUAL! Generation, did you call it! *freaks out* WOnderful! bravo! it's hard to write such a mammoth fic from beginning to end, and I applaud your ability! My favorite chapter was definetly the special one. _ GO YOU!

This story is really really awesome, but I would like to suggest something. You should put the conversation on separate lines and put a blank line inbetween these conversations so that it's easier to read. This will make your stories even more popular...Well, great story!

Rouge is really begining to become a good character. I like the way you modified Rouge's Thunder Kid spell. Anyway, keep those chapters coming.

WHOA! James likes Rouge. Man this is and EXCELLENT story. I hope Rouge and James become good Dragoons and fight alongside Bryant, Julie, David, and Sakura.

This is great so far. You have an excellent imagination. The only things I have to say is why not create a new dragoon? I've created a new dragoon of my own: The Dragoon of the Ultima Dragon. Also, please finish the story! I am dying to know who that guy in the ancient robes is.

Very good, interesting how you added the original dragoons in there, and that whole Red/WhiteSilver/Darkness Dragoon love triangle is Neat.

Coolness! Sailor Moon references! *Starts waving a flag that says 'Sailor Jupiter Rules!'* Great story!