Awww! That was really sweet, without being mushy at all! Shaina sounds like a really intelligent girl, and I think she and Zell will be perfect for each other. Finally, a romance that doesn't drown you in the sticky sweetness of it all! I'm waiting eagerly to read the next part of this!

Alan writing a romance?

I must have missed something...

Is this still Earth? Am I awake?

[pinches herself.]

Yup.

Well, its pretty good Alan. o-o

But you moving to Harry Potter? Man, that would be very scary.

do teens really talk like this? I mean every other word is cool...cool...etc. Still, the hectic quality of teen talk does come through, and all the ideas clicking about is interesting. Teens do like to plan things ahead to the smallest detail and then watch it all unravel...does a guy ever admit he's 'small'..er than his friends? So many questions, but i like the story.

rinoa has a sister?interesting. nice start. sharp dialog that fits rinoa somehow. definitely would like to read more.

First things first: your characterization of Zell is great. I mean, he's very much a normal guy, not the overrated punk kid that everyone makes him out to be. If you ask me, these characters, for being only 17, were portrayed a bit too maturely. It's cool to see them in more normal, relaxed settings. Second of all, this brings up a very original concept, what with Seifer and Zell being brothers, Squall and Rinoa never having fallen in love in that cliched way, and Zell being left with his insomnia rather than the only remaining character who is thrown at him with no forewarning and no plausible reason. Not bad - Lastly, although this has little to do with the fic itself, I've gotta say, those generic teen comedies *will* (mark my words!) be the end of us all. There are just too many flicks out there revolving around pregnant cheerleaders and two completely opposite people falling in love within the span of an hour. And who in their right mind casts a 26 y/o to play the part of a high school senior? *grumble* Oh well, before I go off on another tangent, this was damn good .

Yep, this is cool alright. Just as I expected. This has really made me curious to see what will happen next...Hmmm, I think I'm hooked. Bravo!

Uh... I'm confused... Is this like an alternate universe? Please continue.

Whoa, what-if city here! Very interesting concepts to be explored here, and extremely original! I never thought of some of your ideas ever, like Seifer and Zell being...I mean, that's really original. I can't wait for more of this!