This is a great story. I can't wait to read the sequels.

Wow! I loved this story! I'd never considered this possibility, but the backstory surrounding Marcus & how he & Marie interacted seemed entirely believable, opening a window on another side of Marcus's character. Marie is a very interesting character in her own right; I know I'm coming to this late in the game, but I'm hoping you have more stories with her out there!

OH my god! that was absolutely amazing~ I was completely hooked on that story. Other than maybe 2 or 3 thchnical erors, that was a fantastically written story as well. I am really looking forward to reading the sequels you have posted. You did an amazing job of characterization, and were able to introduce everything without making it seem boring or repetitious, which I envy...that was just beautiful! thank you so much for that story!

~Kai =^_^=

This is really good. I'm gonna read the sequals now. :D

I think I love you, will you marry me? OOps! Sorry! I think my husband might object.

Actually, I loved this story. My only problem is that there were some parts where you had incorrect plurals and capitalization, even that barely detracted.

Keep writing.

Nice story! I mean, great story! Mind you, I usually don't like new character stories, however I really liked your! Probably because it involved Marcus... I wouldn't have liked this story if Marie was his biological daughter... Because if she was, then it meant that Marcus wasn't a virgin! Saving himself for..., only for Susan! LOL! I also don't like Marcus stories if and when the object of his eyes is someone other than Susan! Yah, you guessed it... I only want Marcus to be with Susan and only her forever! Once again, I really liked, er loved your story! I see that you have written a sequal too, so..., I wouldn't beg you to write one... I might though, after reading all them sequals! Keep up the great work! Peace!

Oh... this was lovely.

I've always had a very large soft spot for Marcus.

Cool! :) I liked.

Nice. Maybe a bit corny at the end, but overall very nice.

*Very* nicely done! Keep up the good work! :-)

Wow! Great story. :) I never would have thought Marcus would have had a daughter. :) Keep up the great work! ~Lyta~