it was a great descriptive story but you should have made it longer and not just jump into the high betty/jughead romance(the kiss).

thats what i do when someone calls me crazy

thanks very much![not sarcastically]

I sssooo love it!

Lovely!

I always imagined Betty with Jughead and you have done a beautiful job. Could have been longer, though.

not bad jug and betty is good better than archie or reggie or some random guy someone puts in a story

I think you moved way too quickly. I liked it a lot until you got to the line where betty asks "what's wrong with me?" Jughead would probably think he misheard her at first, then try to say "nothing" and other short, non descriptive words, then when she doesn't believe him, then the full fledged anger should come and he could say that line.

Also, Betty would move slower than that. She wouldn't just kiss him because he complimented her and she thought he was cute. Give her a few more paragraphs of realization, and flashbacks to all the times he was there to help cheer her up when Archie and Ron wasn't. Then have her kiss him.

I love the pairing by the way, and with a few edits it would be great! (Yes, I am a literary editor type of person)

was cute.

your line at the end had me cracking up btw!

Short, to the point, sappy, and an awesome Juggie/Bets story!

Classic Cute Short!

I don't think you're a pyscho! I LOVE Betty/Jughead, and this fic is just AWESOME! :D

Very nice! I loved it!

Awesome story! Jughead and Betty are SO meant to be!

Wonderful. I'm a big supporter of Betty/Jughead. I feel that it's right.

It was kind of OOC, but still really cute! I admit, I'm not for the Archie and Betty pairing, either. I like your pairing much better!

Aww!

I absolutley ADORED this!

Great work!

Aww...so sweet of Jug! Great story and cool pairing!